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IELTS Writing Test 68

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Task 1: The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: Some people think that people who are over 60 years old should not work and should be made to retire. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Write at least 250 words.

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6 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 68”

  1. ayush rai says:

    The graph provides information about the percentage of visitors visited in four variety of tourist destination from the year 1980 to 2010 in Brighton city of England.
    Overall, at the end of period the rate of sightseer in festivals and art gallery whittled down .while the percentage of travelers on pavilion and pier experienced the significant rise compared to the beginning of the period.
    In 1980, the percentage of tourist on art Festival hovered around 25% to 30% throughout the period forming a plateau shaped trend. During the years 1980-2000, the ebbed and flowed trend in the percentages of holidaymakers was noticed on piers and then it inclined gradually for the rest of the years. At the beginning it was 10% and by the end of the year it rose to approximately 22%.
    The trend of tourists visiting on pavilion was more dramatic. From the year 1980 to 1985 the percentage increased gradually after which it skyrocketed to nearly 48% in 1995, which is nearly double from the beginning of the year. The trend than reversed and plummeted to 35% in 2000 and followed steady decline for ten years to 32% in 2010.In 1980 the visitors on art gallery was more than 20% of total tourist in brighton. In between the years 1980-1990, this place witnessed highest of 38% in 1985 and then plunged to 19% in 1990.For the rest of the years, the tends showed gradual decreased to 9% in 2010.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Do not write overall here because you cannot choose two lines and ignore other two. ‘the ebbed and flowed’ trend should be used as a verb hence write here the ebb and flow trend. ‘tourists visiting on pavilion’ ‘on’ should not be here. ‘the trend than’ it should be then not than. ‘the visitors on art gallery’ it should be to art gallery. Gradual decrease not decreased. We notice that you have seen our line graph video as well and used the phrases really well. Keep up the good work, we see a lot of improvement in your writing.

  2. ayush rai says:

    Thanks IELTS-PTE for feedback and encouragement ,It would be great if you add videos on process diagram and bar chart.To be honest, last time i got L-7.5,R-7,S-6 and W-5.5,so i need to work hard to improve my poor writing as well as speaking.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Sure we will keep upload videos regularly on all modules. You please subscribe to our channel so that when we upload a new video you get the notification.

  3. Abdul says:

    It is argued that old people who are over 60 should not work and should be made to retire. This essay agrees with this statement because the effect of their age on their mental and physical health, because they take many jobs that should be occupied by younger people and because they have to pay more attention to their own families.

    Aging affects our mental and physical abilities. This effect could reduce old people’s productivity especially those who work on manual jobs. It also might results some physical inquiries. For example, an article that I’ve read which states that old worker’s inquiries rates surpasses the rate of young workers.

    Being an old worker or employee means that you’re taking other young person’s job. I believe that it is not responsible for a person who lives and work in two generations. Young people deserve the opportunites to get these jobs. For example, many old teachers in my country ages in their jobs, which might lead to young teachers unemployment.

    Many old workers don’t spend much of their time with their families. This problem which is caused by their busyness might lead to weak relationships with their family. For example, one of my friends whoes old father spend most of his time working, didn’t really spend any father-son time.

    In conclusion, I agree that old worker should not work and should be made to retire because they have to spend the rest of their days with their families, because they are taking the younger generation jobs and because their old age could affect their physical and metals abillities.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You need to start with a better introduction because introduction is the most important part of your essay and plays a huge role in getting good bands in writing. Please watch our tutorial on task 2 if you have not watched it already. Also the sentence formation in the introduction is not correct. For example – because the effect of their age on their mental and physical health – firstly you did not mention whether the effect is positive or negative and secondly you again used the word because which does fit with the sentence properly. It also might result not results you cannot use ‘s’ ‘es’ with the verb when might or may is used. Physical inquiries? I think you mean injuries. Never use short forms such as I’ve, you’re, don’t. These are very common mistakes which students make and because of which their band score is lowered. All this is explained in our tutorial so please watch it carefully it will help you to improve your attempt.

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