IELTS Writing Test 6

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Task 1: The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel (gas and oil). To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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67 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 6”

  1. Saira Zainab says:

    Hello Sir/Madam,
    Can you please evaluate my writing and give me band score after evaluation:

    The figure highlights the consumption of three junk food items, namely: pizza, fish, chips, and hamburgers by Australian youngsters between 1975 and 2000. As an overall trend, the spending on pizza and burgers witnessed an upward trend, whereas fish and chips initially fluctuated and then showed a downward trend. The consumption of food and chips was highest till 1985, while burgers outraced fish and chips from 1990 to 2000.

    The chart data shows that fish and chips per year consumption in 1975 was exactly a hundred and experienced a linear drop to roughly 82 in the mid of the year 1980. The figure then rose, before significantly falling to the lowest point at just below 40 in 2000.

    The Aussies spending on pizza and burgers was nearly under ten in the first year. Thereafter, burger consumption substantially climbed and outraced the fish and chips after the year 1985. Furthermore, Australian teenagers spending on burgers remained stable between the middle of the year 1995 to mid of the year 2000.
    Similarly, the consumption of pizza witnessed stability in the final years 1995 and 2000, before escalating enormously from two to exactly a hundred.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      First mistake fish and chips are together so no comma between these. Do not use word spending because it is not mentioned in the graph it is consumption so use this word only. Interpret the units correctly, ‘was exactly a hundred’ it is eaten hundred times not consumption is hundred. Same mistake repeated with other food items. Do not use word Aussies it is informal. Please watch this video on our official youtube channel on how to write task 1 to improve your task 1 and subscribe to it so that you get notification when we upload new videos on writing.

  2. shabana says:

    Hello Sir/Madam,

    Please grade my task 2

    Fossil fuels such as petrol and gas have always been a problem for many nations. It is often argued that worldwide organizations must curb all countries on excessive use of gas and gasoline. I concur that the international community should take quick actions to control the overuse of these fuels. In this essay, I will support my view with relevant examples.

    One of the major drawbacks of burning these natural resources in abundance is Air Pollution. The excessive depletion of oil and gas have detrimental effects on the environment, as they emit dangerous gases, which create air and water hazards and as a consequence, affects our health. For instance, Automobiles, which utilize petrol as a fuel, exhaust relatively poisonous gases which can cause breathing problem, lungs, and other chronic diseases. In contrast, the use of electric vehicles should be prioritized globally because they are comparatively reliable and eco-friendly than combustion engines.

    In addition to the above, the ultimate utilization of these two fuels is extremely expensive. For example, power plants, which generate electricity consume these high-value fuels to run electric producing devices, and as a result, electricity supplier charge substantially higher price for consumption of power. Therefore, communities should restrict energy producers to use oil and petrol. Instead, they can use wind energy for generation of energy. This would lower the consumption of costly fuels.

    To sum up, as mentioned there are diverse effects of consumption of the higher amount of natural fossil fuels (gas and oil) in our daily lives. In my opinion, a law should be established by foreign entities to control the growing demand for these resources.

  3. prasanna says:

    The line chart provides information on variation of fast-food consumption habits of Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000. For comparison, three popular food types have been chosen namely hamburgers, fish and chips and pizza. Overall, an increase of popularity of fast-food can be observed while there had been an alteration of preference on each type of food.

    In 1975, average teenager ate about 115 portions of fast food within a year. This figure had more than doubled over the period of twenty-five years.

    When individual food type is considered, fish and chips was the most popular type among the adolescents in 1975. The popularity however started dropping since 1975 towards 1980, but saw a brief resurgence in 1985. After that the popularity continually dropped towards year 2000 so that it had become the least popular type of fast food.

    Hamburgers on the other hand showed a steady growth until 1985 but after that the growth rate started to decline and by 2000 this had become the most popular fast food. Popularity of pizza showed a comparable steady growth until 1995 and then leveled off at a figure close to 85.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Ate about 115 portions is wrong it is number of times that item is eaten. Rather than saying growth rate write words related to eating like consumed, intake etc.

  4. Haruna Adamu says:

    The given line graph indicates the consumption of three different kinds of junk food by teens in Australia from the year 1975 to 2000.
    Overall, it can be seen from the graph that fish and chips which was the most popular fast food declined drastically whereas Hamburges and pizza being the least consumed at the early stages increased dramatically over the period.

    At the beginning of the period, the number of times people ate fish and chips in 1975 was exactly 100, being the highest and at the same time the consumption of Hamburger and pizza were just around 10 and 5 respectively. The amount of times teenagers consumed fish and chips deceased to a little above 80 in 1980, and rose slightly to about 90 in 1985, while those who prefer eating hamburger increased sharply to above 80 in 1985, and on the same year, pizza consumption also went up steadily to around 30.

    The number of teens in favor of fish and chips continued to declined further to below 40 in the year 2000, ending the period of being the most unpopular fast food, however, hamburgers and pizza eaters saw a surge in their number with the former being the highest at end of the period, which stood at 100, followed by the latter being around 80.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Do not use the word teens it might be considered informal by some examiners, write teenagers. Food did not decline but consumption of food declined. Both hamburgers and pizza cannot be the least because least is always one. Those who preferred not prefer. Number of teens did not decline but number of times fish was consumed declined.

  5. Haruna Adamu says:

    Global leaders should instantly meet to take a definite action in the reduction of the use of hydrocarbons as source of energy across the world.
    I personally side with this opinion and this essay will elaborate further on the negative effects in the use of fossil fuels such as causing almighty global warming, air pollution and diseases.

    One of the major side effects in the use of fossil fuel is the depletion of the ozone layer causing climate change resulting in global warming and floods across the globe especially in Africa,Asia and the Americas. For instance,the United Nations (UN) Secretary General reported in August,2017, in their general assembly meeting that close to one billion people have died across the world in the last five years through flooding which is as a result of climate change.

    In addition, the use of oil and gas by vehicles and machines as their source of fuel had contributed greatly to air pollution around the earth. For example, in May last year,The Sun news paper based in the UK ,published that there are almost three billion different types of cars in this universe and 99.99% of them are all using fossil fuel resulting in more pollution in the big towns and cities across the world.

    Finally, there is a clear evidenced from the World Health Organization (WHO) that majority of the people who suffer from respiratory diseases like lung cancer have one way or other in their life time, live in a highly fossil fuel polluted places.

    To conclude, base on the above listed serious complications on the use of fossil fuels, I strongly agree that it use should be reduce to a minimal level and the appropriate authorities should focus more on the renewable sources of energy such as wind,solar and plants.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Side effects of the use of not in the use of. One billion people? that seems like an outrageous figure. Newspaper is one word not news paper. Lived in a, not live in a. Serious complications of the use not on the use. Its use not it use should be reduced, not reduce. You keep repeating this mistake, always use second form of verb with should be. Instead of plants as renewable source use hydro or nuclear.

  6. Charles says:

    Sustainability is key to ensuring mankind remain in existence. Technological advancements have resulted in increased consumption with resulting increase in consumption of fossil fuels needed to power them. This increased consumption comes with a price that threatens our existence. This essay highlights reasons why I agree that fossil fuel utilization has to be reduced and what we should be willing to sacrifice in the process.
    Power generation is vital for almost every activity necessary for us to live comfortably, survive, do business and carry out or daily activities. To generate this power, communities all over the world have to burn fossil fuels. For example, factories utilize power in production of essential items that makes life easy, hospital use energy to help save lives and many other sectors utilize electricity in various ways; almost anything one can think of needs fossil fuel consumption to make it happen. However, this comes at a cost.
    Pollution is detrimental to the survival of our species and comes as a result of the rising utilization of fossil fuels. For example, the fumes that emanates from vehicles, air planes and locomotive trains, a byproduct of fossil fuel combustion; causes a plethora of damage both to our health and the environment. It also damages the ozone layer which protects humans and other living organisms from the harsh ultraviolet rays of the sun; that can cause skin cancers, damage plants and melt ice caps leading to famine, droughts and flooding.
    To sum up, although consumption of fossil fuel is a necessity, our survival needs to be considered first because if we damage the world, where and how will the future generation exist? Thus I implore on world leaders to unite in advocating and searching for more sustainable means of power generation.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Mankind remains not remain. Carry out our not or daily activities. Items that make not makes. However this comes at a cost should be starting line of next paragraph. Fumes that emanate not emanates, you make this mistake repeatedly, do not use ‘s’ or ‘es’ with plural. Try to avoid over usage of a word for example in the entire passage you have used fossil fuel try to use other words here like coal, petroleum etc. Plethora of damage is a wrong phrase. Same thing cannot lead to drought and flooding. Start your conclusion with ‘To reiterate’ a much better phrase than to sum up. Try to avoid asking questions in the essay, phrase the sentence in a normal sentence form. You cannot write like I implore because here you are getting personal something which we have highlighted in our tutorial on task 2 to avoid.

  7. annie says:

    The line graph illustrates the variation in quantity and variety of food intake of teenagers in Australia for the year 1975 to 2000.

    Overall, the graph of hamburgers and pizza depicts a linear increase in the consumption whereas the consumption of fish and chips has decreased linearly. From year 1995 to 2000, hamburgers and pizza consumption has seen no major change while fish and chips consumption dropped drastically.

    With regards to the amount of fish and chips consumed, it began at 100 number of times every year in the year 1975 with decrease to 82 number of times by 1980. Whereas, hamburgers and pizza were not very popular in the year 1975 with consumption of 5 and 2 number of times respectively.

    On the other hand, the consumption of hamburger and and pizza increased and finally supersede fish and chips consumption in the year 1985 and 1990 respectively. The consumption of hamburgers was constant to 100 number of times from year 1995 to 2000, while consumption of pizza was constant at 82 number times a year. At the same time consumption of fish and chips fell and reached to 39 number of times in the final year.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      For the duration 1975 to 2000 not year. Chips had decreased not has decreased. You cannot use has in this task since data is from past. 1975 which decreased to 82 not which decrease to 82. Superseded not supersede please take care of tense in task 1.

  8. Omar says:

    and consider the time period is correct, my bad

  9. DD says:

    The given line chart illustrates the changes in the quantity and 3 types of junk food eaten by teenagers in Australia in a period of 25 years from 1975 to 2000.
    Overall, before the year of 1975, Fish and Chips was the most consumed fast food in Australia with 100 amounts recorded by 1975, then the Hamburgers and Pizza showed up by a few times around 5 to 10 until they started being the most common of the consumption fast food for the teenagers. It is clearly evident that Hamburgers made a significant increase between the 1975 and 1985 reached more than 80 in number of times eaten per year. In contrast, the Fish and Chips was swaying by 15 to 20 until 1985 before it made a dramatic drop from the period 1985 to 2000.

    Furthermore, Pizza made almost the same as Hamburgers, the number went up between 1975 until 1995 reached the peak of almost 85 of times eaten, then remains stable for next five years.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Not 100 amounts but 100 times. Your use of language is informal for example ‘showed up by a few times’. Most common of the consumption is grammatically wrong phrase, it should be the most commonly consumed among Australian teenagers. You have treated objects like persons in the task with phrases like ‘showed up’ ‘hamburgers made a significant increase’, ‘pizza made almost the same as hamburgers’ which is also grammatically incorrect. 85 times eaten not 85 of times eaten. Then remained not remains because data is from past. You need to work on your language and sentence structure. Please watch our video lessons on writing these will apprise you how to attempt writing task 1 and what mistakes to avoid.

  10. Pp says:

    The problems from fossil fuel is a growing concern all over the world. The question is: How can this stopped? It is thought by some people that rapid intervention from foreign communities would help minimize the utilization of non-renewable products. In my opinion, I completely agree that international leaders should act immediately to ensure the reduction on the production of oil and gas fuels, because it causes severe environmental pollution and death.

    One of the reason why I agree that leaders abroad need to put an end to the consumption of non-renewable product is that it promotes environmental pollution. Globally, there has been an increase in the use of oil and gas, which has resulted to the release of harmful substances into our environment. This substances depletes the ozone layer which results to global warming. The effect of global warming is flooding, climate change, cyclones and several other disasters. For instance, flooding the banks of seas can lead to severe damage to properties and topography of the land. According to recent studies, it states that there will be a 20 percent rise in flooding by 2022 if the use of fossil fuel is not reduced.

    Another reason why foreign communities should mitigate the use of oil and gas is that it leads to death. The contaminants from exhaust pipes, burning and refineries pose a serious threat to the health of the populace. Inhaling a large quantity of this harmful gases such as sulphur oxide can lead to respiratory diseases and may result to death. For instance, according to a report by Guardian Times, 15percent of death recorded in 2018 were as a result of carbon monoxide inhalation. Therefore, usage of fossil fuels needs to be decrease to avoid this problem.

    In conclusion, I believe that international leaders should act expeditiously to decrease the consumption of non-renewable product because if its harmful effects such as environmental pollution and death.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      How can this be stopped? be is missing here. Do not write in my opinion i complete agree instead write I completely concur. One of the reasons not reason a very common mistake that many students make, with this phrase one of the – always use plural of the noun. You cannot say that we need to put an end to non-renewable resources because it is an invalid argument since renewable sources of energy are not sufficient enough. Has resulted in the release not to the release. According to recent studies it states that is wrong formation, it should A recent study states that. 15% of deaths not death. Need to be decreased not decrease. Because of its harmful effects not if its.

  11. Sayali Vaidya says:

    The line graph describes the variation in quantity and variety of fast food like pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975-2000.

    Overall, the line graph vertically shows the number of times fast food eaten per year by Australian teenagers and horizontally particular year are presented from 1975 to 2000.

    In 1975, the number of times Australian youngsters consuming pizza and hamburgers were below 20. But, in 1985 there was a rapid increase for teenagers consuming hamburgers which rose to nearabout 82 times. After 1985, the number increased and it remained constant in the year 1995 and 2000.

    On the other hand, love for pizza by youngsters was increasing every year and it remained steady to approximately 82 times in the year 1995 and 2005.

    Whereas, fish and chips were the highest that is 100 times consumed by Australian teenagers amongst all the fast food in the year 1975. But, after that, there were fluctuations from 1980 to 2000. From 1985- 2000 there was a decreasing trend of youngsters consuming fish and chips. In 2000, it went down to near about 39 times.

    Dear Team,
    I would be happy enough to hear a band score for this task.!!
    Thanks in advance.
    You are doing a wonderful job!

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Write 1975 to 2000 and not 1975-200. Rapid increase for teenagers consuming is incorrect better formation would have been rapid increase in the consumption of hamburgers. near about are two separate words not one. Love for pizza among youngsters not by youngsters. Instead of steady use the word it plateaued in 1985. Fish and chips were the highest is incorrect, consumption of fish and chips was the highest. Instead of fluctuations use the word ebbed and flowed from 1975 to 1985 after which its consumption declined linearly. Your bands score would be 1.5 bands out of 3 for task 1.

      And please submit your task 2 again. It was deleted because of some technical issues.

  12. Sayali Vaidya says:

    Thank you so much for your reply. Apart from these comments you mentioned, what else I need to improve my Band score?
    Moreover, I have written task2 for writing test 7 and not for 6.
    So, you want me to write that one again?

  13. thanu says:

    The line graph demonstrates the different amount of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.The chart is described the various kinds of fast food.(Pizza ,Hamburgers, Fish and chips)
    The highest number of fish and chips was consumed in the year 1975.The least amount of Pizza was eaten by 1975 which was nearly 20 of times.
    The number of times eaten pizza was grown dramatically from 1975 to 1995.As well as the proportion of hamburgers was risen gradually from 1975 to 1995.But number of hamburgers was higher than number of times consumed pizza.
    The chart depicts, a sharp growth of hamburgers in the year 1985.But, the amount of hamburgers was dropped by 1980. It was risen in the year 1985
    .After 1985, the number of fish and chips was dropped dramatically which was became the least popular fast food by 2000.In the year 1985, there was a huge variation between hamburgers and pizza.The amount of hamburgers was roughly higher than number of times consumed pizza(nearly 25 of times had whereas had 80 of times) .As well as, there was a steady amount of the hamburgers between 1995 and 2000 which was exactly 100. Finally, the number of times eaten pizza was gradually increased from 1975 to 1985.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is not the amount of fast food consumed but number of times it was consumed. The chart is described is wrong, the chart describes and not write anything in brackets in your task. Pizza was eaten by teenagers not 1975, which was nearly 20 times not 20 of times. Pizza was eaten not eaten pizza. Grew dramatically not was grown dramatically. You need to work on your sentence formation specially the use of prepositions and helping verbs, you have used the word was almost wrongly in every sentence. Please try improve this first because if you keep repeating this mistake you will not get more than 5.5 bands in writing.

  14. thanu says:

    Thank you sir

  15. Diluni says:

    Task 1
    The given line graph illustrates the details of consuming three fast food categories by Australian teenagers during a twenty five year period which started in 1975.

    Overall, it is noticeable that eating times of fish and chips had shown a downward trend while eating times of hamburgers and pizza had been boomed.

    Initially, fish and chips was the most popular among young people and they had eaten that 100 times per year. Pizza and hamburgers had eaten less than 10 times a year. Fish and chips line had fluctuated and became around 95 times by 1985. However, after that the line had dropped to be less than 40 times by 2000.

    Hamburgers line had been sharply increased to be 85 times per year by 1985 and after that it had shown a gradual growth to reach its peak of 100 times by 1995. The number had leveled off until 2000. Fish and chips line and hamburger line intersected between 1985 and 1990. The times of consuming Pizza a year had been rapidly risen to reach its peak of above 80 by 1995 and then it was in a plateau until the end of the period. This line intersected with fish and chips line by 1990.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      The same feedback to your earlier task applies here. ‘eating times of fish and chips’ is wrong it is actually the number of times these foods were consumed. Pizza and hamburgers had eaten is also wrong it should be Pizza and hamburgers had been eaten. Do not write the line had dropped in a line a graph talk about the parameters mentioned on the vertical line of the graph. Please watch our tutorial on line graph the link is given below:

  16. Jagmeet kaur says:

    We are living in a modern era where communicating , reaching from one shore of the world to other part of the world within fraction of time is easy.This has made the excessive use of fossils fuels. It is high time that international agencies should come together and try to reduce the daily use of natural resources.

    The far and foremost reason of keeping an eye on the use of these resources is that ,nowadays people are using these fossil fuels to such an extend that it appear impossible that our next generation will get any chance to hold these fossil fuels in there life. Another worth telling view point is that utilizing too much of these fuels have an effect on our climate. Global warming is the result of this. Today it has became threat to human kind . To control this situation ,there is a need to decrease the activity where we use less natural resources.
    Apart from them, one more mentioning view is that fossil fuels have became expensive that the genuine needers find it difficult to get hold of them for example we can easily see that petrol rates are increasing rapidly in the past few months that it has became impossible for the common man to get hold of these which result in disappointment in people.
    In the end , I can clearly say that internatinal agencies should came forward to make rules on the use of these fossil fuels . So that lots of problems can be tackle that can became serious in future.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      The ending of your introduction is not proper because you did not mention whether you agree or disagree and what will be discussed in the essay later. It should be first and foremost not far and foremost. Such an extent not extend. It appears not appear. ‘one more mentioning view’ is not a proper way write, instead you can write ‘one more view worth mentioning is’. Have become not became. Should come forward not came forward. There should not be a full stop before so in the last line. Problems can be tackled not tackle. Can become not became, you have made this mistake repeatedly so take a serious note of this.

  17. Rinal kansara says:

    There is no dobut that,consumption of fossil fuel is increasing at a startling pace across the globe.Since there are detrimental effects of it on environment, government must emphasise on decresing its uses.While some people advocate that individuals should decline the uses of gas and oil,some believe that it is useful for them in their day to day life.But,i support the former notion and in the following section both views will be discussed.
    To commense with,gas and oil are non renewable resources on the earth.Therefore,prior to using these,people should think about their future which will be certainly difficult for their children because still scientists have not found any other resource for people and several resources rely on weather such as solar energy.Secondly,it enhances pollution and damages the environment.Owing to this,all these fules are emitt carbon dioxide and escalate temperature on the earth as well as global warming.Conseqently, the day is not far when the earth will become a boiling pot.For instance,in India,in Agra,the white colour of marbles of the Taj Mahal was gradually converting in yellow colour due to air pollution.So, government banned on vehicle nearby this place to protect it from pollution.
    On the contrary,it is difficult to use scant fuels for people because plenty of businesses run on fossil fuel and people utilize it daily for several purposes.Moreover, plethora of people will become unemployed because organizations utilise it in machinery for production, it is useful for transportation.As a result,people will not be able to travel anywhere and students will deprive from education.
    To recapitulate,whlist plethora of industries use fuel for production and people absolutely depend on it,it is harmful for environment and there is no another way to get it again,once it will have finished.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘individuals should decline the uses’ instead write ‘individuals should reduce the use’ there is a slight difference between reduce and decline. It enhances pollution, enhance is generally used with positive words, so instead use the word it spreads the pollution. Spelling of fuels is wrong, and fuels are emitt carbon dioxide is wrong way to write, fuels emit carbon dioxide is the right way to write. Escalates not escalate. Banned on vehicles, banned the vehicles. Do not use the phrase plethora of people, plethora is used with commodities. Once it will have finished, instead once it will be finished or better once it is exhausted completely.

  18. Rinal kansara says:

    The line graph reveals the variations in the amount and three types of eatables namely,pizza, fish and chips and hamburgers which were eaten by Australian teenagers within a timespan of 25years.
    Overall,the consumption of hamburgers and pizza raised and number of fish and chips went through the fluctuations over the period of 25 years.
    According to the graph, teenagers ate nearly 10times hamburgers in 1975 and the figure of consumption of hamburgers dramatically inclined approximately 85times in 1985.After that, it again swelled smoothly,reached its zenith,around 101times in 2000.

    As per the line graph,in the year of 1975, the consumption of fish and chips was about 100times and it gradually declined almost 83times after 5years.Again,the number of times of fish and chips climed close to 97times in 1985.Then,the figure continued to plummet steadily to the end of the period,reaching around 50times in 1995 and hitting a low point roughly 39times in 2000.Furthermore, Australian started consumption of pizza round about 7times in 1975.Afterwards,the pattern of pizza consumption steadily soared till 20years almost 83times in 1995 and remained plateau in next 5 years.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘number of times of fish and chips’ it is not the number of fish and chips it is the numbers times is was consume. Also give space between numbers and times for example 97 times not 97times. You can use the word stead with plummet because plummet means sharp and sudden decline hence it cannot be steady. ‘remain plateaus in next 5 years’ is wrong way to write, either write ‘remained constant for next 5 years’ or ‘it plateaued for the next 5 years. But overall a much better attempt with very few grammatical mistakes. Your hard work is showing with lesser mistakes in your each attempt. Keep it up.

  19. Rinal kansara says:

    Sorry I have written wrong spelling of commence bcz after submitting I saw ur report of mistakes.plz don’t consider it and I try my best to follow ur advice

  20. Anj says:

    The line graph highlights the variations in the quantity of consumption of fish and chips, pizza and hamburgers among the youngsters over a 25 year period in Australia.
    Overall, the figures for consumption of hamburgers and pizza had significantly increased whereas the choice of having fish and chips had dramatically decreased in numbers since 1975 to 2000.

    The fish and chips were the highest priority of choice of eating among the young people than hamburgers and pizza in 1975 with numbers indicating 100 and the figures for the latter ones were approximately 10 and 5 respectively .However , the trends for the consumption of of fish and chips had gradually decreased reaching a downward peak of about 83 in 1980 ,which was followed by a steady increase to a peak of almost 88 in 1985 . Subsequently, its figures had decreased sharply to just below 40 in the year 2000.

    The amount of eating hamburgers had been erratic since 1975 and drastically increased to 100 in the year 2000.The figures for pizza consumption had similar pattern of increase and reached a peak of about 82 in 1995 ,followed by a plateaux in the next five years .

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘The fish and chips were the highest priority of choice’ wrong way to write, instead write fish and chips were the most popular choice of food among the three categories mentioned in the graph in 1975. ‘numbers indicating 100’ is again 100 what, 100 times it was consumed. The trend for, not trends for. You did not mention times with numbers, numbers alone do not make any sense.

  21. Anj says:

    Maximum utilization of resources such as oils and gasses has been the major environmental concern in this contemporary world . In order to mitigate this problem and to ensure the usage of available resources within the safe limits to safeguard the environment ,an appeal has be put forward to the world wide organisations to curb the overuse of fossil fuels by the countries .From my perspective , I cast no doubt on the veracity of this statement and I am on the same wavelength with them on this matter.

    To embark with , there are a plethora of deleterious effects to the environment due to the enormous usage of fossil fuels . Firstly, burning of fuels leads to increase in air pollutants posing degradation of air quality . Subsequently, the air pollution causes potential hazards to all the human individual. In the recent survey conducted by the WHO has submitted its report stating increased incidences of respiratory illnesses such as Asthma, COPD and other life threatening diseases .

    Another negative repercussion of excessive usage of fossil fuels leads to the detrimental effects on fauna and flora . We ,humans have been sacrificing large acres of land in search of fossil fuels under the pretext of modernization and urbanization. This activity of deforestation disturbs the ecosystem and the natural habitats making the lives of plants and animals to a miserable extent .Consequently ,the list of endangered and extinct species are increasing abundantly .Finally,the more striking consequences of burning fossil fuels by the industries and factories contributes to the effects of global warming leading to the changes in the sea level which triggers natural calamities such as earthquake , tsunami and so on .

    To reiterate , I would assert that the global organisation to look forward into this matter and to work in collaboration with the developed and the developing countries to hamper the excessive use of fuels to foster the benefits to individual and the society as a whole .

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Better introduction, well written with one small correction ‘I am on the same wavelength’ instead use same opinion. ‘posing degradation of air quality’ instead write causing degradation. ‘negative repercussion’ do not use negative with repercussion because it is redundant repercussion itself means negative effects. Overall it is a very good attempt. Keep it up.

      • Anj says:

        Thank u so much sir. Your suggestions are really helpful to improve ourself in writing.

        • IELTS MASTER says:

          Always glad to help 🙂

          • bonnie says:

            The chart illustrates that an analysis of 3types of consumption which was purchased by Australian juvenile from 1975 to 2000.
            Overall, the number of times in fish and chips decreased dramatically between 1985 to 2000, while that of hamburgers and pizza increased until 1995. Fish and Chips was the highest number of times in this graph,100 times, while pizza was the lowest times. Although consumption of fish and chips went down in 1980, it still rose to around 100 times per year in 1985. In contrast, that of hamburgers went up significantly by over 80 times, pizza went up gradually by around 30 times. In 1985, consumption of fish and chips dropped dramatically to under 40 times, on the other hand, that of pizza increased substantially until 1995 and remained constant between 1995 to 2000 and that of hamburgers went up gradually between 1985 to 2000.

          • IELTS MASTER says:

            ‘number of times in fish and chips’ it should be number of times fish and chips consumed. You have repeated this mistake throughout the task. It is number of times these items had been consumed which should be mentioned with times. Also you need to work on your sentence structure. Please watch our tutorial on line it will help you to improve your attempt immensely. The link to the tutorial is given below:


  22. jazzzz says:

    Nations across the globe have gone too far in exploiting natural resources, which adversely affects our environment and ecology system. Natural resources are being used at an alarming rate. According to research, if this trend continue till 2050, then there would be no resources available to us for use. Despite of knowing these problems, no nations are taking effective steps to prevent. Therefore, some people opine that the intervention of international committee is required to prevent further damage. I totally agree with the statement. Many arguments surround my opinion.
    Firstly, natural resources such as gas and oil are limited resources, and we are consuming them at an unprecedented rate. Further, it takes hundreds of years to generate resources again. That means if we run out of these resources than there would be no resources as far as our generation and next many generations are concerned. We are living a comfortable lives because of these resources, as our luxuries such as car, air conditional and all other electronic equipment runs on energy generated by these resources. No nation is ready to sacrifice these luxuries, hence in such case, intervention of international committee is required.
    Further, when these resources were used ,they emit carbon dioxide in the environment, which leads to the problem of global warming. Global warming increases the temperature of earth, and if preventive measures are not taken then this earth would turn to boiling pot and earth would become uninhabitable. For instance, united nation has made policy, according to which every nation has to control their carbon emission within the certain limit. Finally, while exploiting these resources, we are endangering many animal and plant species, it imbalances our ecology system.
    To sum up, by looking at above mentioned problems, I would like to reiterate by saying that international committee has to take some strict action to prevent further damage to the earth. One very simple solution to these problems is to use renewable source of energy, which are eco-friendly as well.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘if this trend continue’ continues. ‘Despite of’ never use of with despite. ‘resources than there’ then not than. ‘air conditional’ air conditioners. ‘electronic equipment runs’ equipment run. ‘when these resources were used’ are used. ‘united nation’ United Nation with capital initials. ‘every nation has to control their’ its not their. ‘by looking at above mentioned problems’ better to write by dint of aforementioned problems. ‘reiterate by saying that’ by saying would not come here because reiterate means to say something.

  23. pinksushi says:

    These days the biggest challenge our world is trying to cope with is to saving Earth from natural disasters. One of them is the frequent use of natural gas, coal and oil. Some argue that it is time that UNO and international NGO’s take instant measures to hinder the overuse of these natural resources in all countries. I tend to agree with this opinion and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.
    Firstly, let us consider the environmental problems which our home planet is facing due to frequent consumption of fossil fuels. Burning of coal and gas is the prime cause of air pollution. This is leading to GREEN HOUSE EFFECT and is causing the thinning of ozone layer every day. For instance, a study by American Environmental Association revealed that ignition of 5 kg coal produce enough carbon dioxide to damage 0.1% of ozone layer. Thus, at this rate, if action is not taken against the exploitation of resources, temperature of Earth would increase and natural balance could be lost.
    Another reason why I agree with the topic statement is that more consumption could result in the depletion of fuels. In other words, our world will run out of natural fuels as they are non-renewable. This will cause the production of synthetic yet expensive sources of energy. In turn, this will raise the cost of all utility commodities which will not be economically viable for many countries. Therefore, this problem needs immediate attention at global level.
    In conclusion, I strongly believe that international organizations and communities should urge all nations to stop the misuse of natural resources. This will save us, as discussed , from environmental and economical instability.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘to saving Earth’ to save not saving. ‘natural disasters. One of them is the frequent use of natural gas, coal and oil’ these are not natural disasters, natural disasters are floods, earthquakes, tsunami which are caused by nature and not man. The rest of the essay is fine and very well written. Great attempt.

  24. pinksushi says:

    Oh yes! you are right. I did not notice that blunder. I am sorry. Thank you so much for your appreciation, it is all because of your useful suggestions last time. I am trying to gain 7.5 in writing.

  25. AKSH says:

    The line graph compares the consumption of three fast foods, namely pizza, hamburger, fish & chips by the Australian teens in a period of 25 years from 1975. As is observed, hamburgers and pizzas were rarely eaten in 1975 while fish and chips are consumed regularly. However, this trend changed eventually in the last decade.
    In 1975, Australian teens consumed fish and chips a100 times while hamburgers and pizzas less than 10 times. There was a dramatic rise in the consumption of hamburgers and it soared to 80 times in 1985 and during this period the consumption of chips and fish fluctuated between 100 and 80 times. The consumption of pizza rose gradually in the first 2 decades and reached more than 80 times a year and remained unchanged until 2000. After 1985, the consumption of hamburgers climbed to 100 times a year and remained in a plateau while fish and chips dwindled to 40 times in 2000.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘&’ do not use such signs in writing, write and instead. ‘chips are consumed’ were not are because data is of past. ‘remained in a plateau’ this is incorrect because plateau means when the value remains unchanged which is not the case in fact the value plateaued for pizza in the last phase not for hamburgers.

  26. AKSH says:

    I thaught the value of both hamburgers and pizza remained unchanged at last. I doubt that , would they penalise us for interpretation mistakes.

  27. PASULA JITENDRA . says:

    The graph illustrates the amount spent on three junk food items namely:Fish and chips,hamburgs,pizza from 1975 to 2000 by Australian teenagers
    Overall,in the starting period the consumption of fish and chips are more whereas the intake of hamburgs and pizza are very time passes the consumption of pizza and hamburgs per year increased linearly and fish and chips consumption decreased linearly from 1980 to 2000.
    In the year 1975 the consumption of fish and chips are 100 exactly per year ,there is a fall to 82 in the year 1980 and witnessed some growth and by the year 1985 the fish consumption is euual to hamburgs and experienced a sudden fall to 40 per year in the year 2000
    The consumption of hamburgs grown rapidly upto 1985 and follows a linear trend as the consumption crossed fish and chips ,pizza consumption is also increased but not as big as hamberg.consumption of pizza and hamberg expericed a stability from 1995 to 2000

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘the amount spent’ it is not the amount spend it is the amount consumed or eaten. In the entire task you have used words ‘are’ ‘is’ which are present tense but data is of past which is a huge mistake. You have given very few numbers from the graph which is not a good practice try to incorporate more numbers to make your task more clear and elaborate.

  28. Veeru says:

    Sir ,please leave a reply on my attempt for task 1.

    The line graph illustrates the variation in the amount of consumption of pizza, fish and chips, and hamburgers by Australian youth for the period 1975 to 2000.
    The consumption of p pizza and hamburgers experienced a significant surge over the period, while the amount of fish and chips consumed by Australian adolescents showed a downward trend.
    In 1975, the consumption rate of pizza was the least amount the three types of food, about 5 per year. Then, it steadily increased until 1995, after which it remained stable till 2000. Hamburgers accounted for nearly 10 per annum and dramatically escalated throughout the period, being the highest by the end of 2000.
    Fish and chips were the highest consumed fast food in 1975, but failed to remain steady or increase since then. For the first ten years, it moved erratically and then witnessed a remarkable slump which resulted as the least by end of the period.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘the consumption rate of pizza was the least amount the three types of food’ this sentence is grammatically wrong, it should be the consumption of pizza was the least among the three types of food. ‘Fish and chips were the highest consumed fast food in 1975’ this again is wrong, fish and chips were the most popular category among youth in 1975 with consumption at 100 times per year.

  29. Dipali P says:

    There is a line graph which gives the information about the quantity and kind of fast food ingested by adolescents of Australia between the years 1975 and 2000. The years are shown on x-axis while the values of number of times eaten per year are shown on y-axis. Overall it is evident that the consumption of fish and chips fluctuated between the years 1975 and 1985 and later on steeply declined until the year 2000. In contrast, both pizza and hamburgers showed popularity among the youths with an increase in consumption between the years 1975 and 2000.
    In the year 1975 , fish and chips were eaten 100 times . Further in the year 1980 there was a slight decline close to ingestion of 80 times in that year. However , from the year 1985 the consumption of fish and chips had a steep fall until the year 2000 reaching only to 40 times per year.
    Pizza and hamburgers were eaten close to
    10 times in the year 1975 by Australian youth. While the consumption of pizza went on slowly increasing until the year 1995 reaching just above 80 times per year ;later on remaining steady u til the year 2000.Similarly the consumption of hamburgers increased but sharply until the year 1985 reaching about 80 times per year . Subsequently again increasing and reaching 100 times in the year 2000.

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