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IELTS Writing Test 57

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Task 1: The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

Write at least 150 words.




Task 2: All fathers should be entitled to time off from work when their children are born. What is your opinion?

Write at least 250 words.

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8 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 57”

  1. Rekha Soni says:

    The bar graph reveals the percentage of leisure activities of Australian children.

    Overall, boys and girls had similar interest in watching TV or videos.While boys were more interested in all activities except art and craft, girls liked art and craft except other activities.

    According to the graph, almost 38% boys enjoyed skateboarding or rollerblading , whereas nearly 26% girls preferred skateboarding or rollerblading.Furthermore, an increase of approximately 18% had been observed between boys and girls in bike riding. Also, contribution of boys and girls in watching TV or videos was static at 100%.

    As per the graph, a difference of 22 % can be seen in boys and girls for electronic or computer games. Moreover, around 36% boys were interested in art and craft but the ratio of girls swelled to around 58% points.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘girls liked art and craft except other activities’ this is repetition of what stated earlier. ‘almost 38% boys’ 38% of boys enjoyed. ‘an increase of approximately 18% had been observed between boys and girls in bike riding’ you cannot say an increase because these are two different categories so you cannot compare instead state the numbers separately for each category. Your writing style is very similar to one of our other students and we think you are posting under a new name if that is the case, we do not why you are doing that.

  2. Rekha Soni says:

    There is no doubt that parents play vital role in children’s life. While some employees take paternity leave at their workplace when new baby is born, others prefer to continue work.But I advocate that it is not good idea to take off from job and in the following section this argument will be discussed.

    To commence with , father have to manage finance of their family. Furthermore, it is father’s responsibility to earn money and bring bread butter for family as father is the cornerstone of each family. Also, money is basic necessity of individuals which can be earned by working hard and going to job. Secondly, there are other family members and mother who can take care for kids entire day and father can easily spend their quality time after coming from their job.

    However, another point to consider is, mother is admitted in hospital during delivery for few days therefore, father have burden to pay delivery charge of hospital.Moverover, kids require nutrients and vitamin supplements which are highly expensive.Consequently, to fulfill all kind of basic needs father have to earn money for family. For instance, as per the research of the mortality rate of new born baby in Calcutta, it has been seen that, breast feeding is major food source of kids until two to three and it should be healthy. But due to scarcity of money women are unable to eat nutrients and feed healthy milk to kids.

    To recapitulate, although father and mother, both are responsible to bringing their children into the world, father have liability towards all family members and they have to work to give happiness and meet all needs of family.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘bring bread butter’ bread and butter. ‘father have burden’ father has the responsibility to pay for the hospital charges.

  3. Rekha Soni says:

    Bcz u have blocked my id and it is my mother’s id.not someone else

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      we did not block your id, why would we do that. if you see carefully you submitted task 56 with the same id and it was checked.

  4. Nuzhat says:

    The bar chart depicts noticeable features regarding the proportion of both genders between the ages of 5-14 indulge in their recreational ventures.
    Overall, it is crystal clear that percentage of boys involved in freedom activities are far more as compared to the girls.
    The percentage of boys involved in skating and arts and crafts are nearly half quarter as compared to the proportion of bike riding, watching videos and electronic games. Boys percentage involved in watching movies skyrocketed and reached to 100%.
    On the other side of coin, girls are less involved in the skateboarding as compared to the boys while the proportion of girls watching movies reached at plateau with the proportion of boys. While, girls involved in art and crafts activities are 38% which is higher than boys.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘it is crystal clear’ avoid using this phrase it is very common and you need to present your writing in a different manner from an average student. ‘The percentage of boys involved in skating and arts and crafts are nearly half quarter as compared to the proportion of bike riding, watching videos and electronic games’ this sentence is not making any sense, you compared two categories with category and half quarter is wrong phrase it is either half or quarter. ‘girls involved in art and crafts activities are 38% which is higher than boys’ this percentage is close to 60% not 38%. Your sentence formation is weak and also interpretation of numbers is not correct. You need to work on your basics first. Please watch our tutorial on how to attempt task 1 it will help you to improve your writing. The link is given below:

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIBUOHdFKII

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