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IELTS Writing Test 30

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Task 1: The pie charts below give information about world population in 1900 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2:  Some people believe that teachers have an important role to play in the educational success, while others think it is the students’ attitude that matters. Discuss both views and share your opinion.

Write at least 250 words.

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19 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 30”

  1. Rinal kansara says:

    It is irrefutable that,education is certainly essential to make a shiny future.Teachers play vital role in individual’s life and they are like a building blocks.Some people believe that teachers are liable for the great achievement of pupils,while others opine it is rely on students.Furthemore, I support the notion that,only teacher can give a best academic knowledge and enhance cognitive skills. There is no doubt that,teachers are corner stone for students.Firstly,they have in-depth knowledge regarding their subjects ,they are well educated with masters and bachelors degree. Consequently,teaching is a piece of cake for them.Secondly,they have many strategies to mitigate difficulties,they have already taken training for several years where learn how to all kind of schooling system and management skill according to curriculum.However,in India, government have been recruiting myriad of staff with atleast bachelor or master degree since multifarious years to vouchsafe a better education to students and it paves the way to decline illiteracy. On the contrary,Since some students have inherent talent,they read online books.While some have desire to become a successful in life,some disruptive the class.Moreover,erudite students work flatout within a time span of exam to perform well. To recapitulate,weighing up the both sides of the views teachers have crucial role during school days.Although there are abundant ways to learn for pupils,teachers are like a candle who burns it self and shows light to others.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It relies on not it is rely on. Again you have not structured it in a proper manner in different paragraphs this is not a good practice. This gives the impression that student is confused and do not have clarity of the task. But good thing is with each attempt your mistakes are going down. In this essay as well very few mistakes but you have to write it in a proper structure. Good language as well in this essay. Good job!

  2. RINAL KANSARA says:

    The pie chart reveals the growth of world population in different territory(I M CONFUSE HERE TERRITORIES OR TERRITORY) within a time span of two various years.
    According to the pie chart,the population growth of other countries noted at minority proportion and experienced a two fold raise to 6% in Middle East and North Africa.North America had insignificant people,whilst mass inclined double to 10% in Africa.However,approximately one tenth people had been living in Latin America and Caribbean.The European recorded well over one fifth,while people enhanced four times well over two quarters at Asia Pacific.
    As per the graph,the inhabitants were relatively uniform and little proportion in Africa,Latin America and in other regions.The number of dwellers in North America were 5% , whereas it escalate five times more in Europe.Moreover, people added three fifth at Asia. Overall,in all over the globe maximum people had been living in Asia,although other countries had plateau population in two years 1900 and 2000.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It should be territories. These are not countries, these are actually continents. Do not write insignificant people, insignificant means not important. Again wrong use of one tenth, one tenth means 10% not 8%. You always use the word proportion incorrectly, it is best do not use it. Same mistake of present tense of verb, escalate. And it is not a span of two years, span means duration, it is a duration of 100 years.

  3. RINAL KANSARA says:

    sorry i had written in good manner but there was a problem in my phone so unable to write it.i will take care it will not happen bcz i started to write it on laptop.i had written this essay 3times then it had received by you.i have just submitted task 1 also.plz tell me bands of both.i have exam after 20days.can i get 6.5 or 7?i want to reach at 7.what should i do more?is there any problem in my ideas or in vocabs?tell me so i will improve it.and thank you so much u r giving me a good teacher.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      To be very honest your current writing can get you maximum of 6.5 bands and it is really hard to get 7 in writing. For that there should be no grammatical mistakes which you often make with prepositions.

  4. Haruun says:

    The two pie charts highlight the total number of people on earth, and the continental percentages for two separate years. Overall, it can be noticed from the charts that world population almost quadruple, and Asia was the most populated region between the two different years.

    The total number of people in 1900 stood at 1.6 billion, which out of that 60% was in Asia, being the majority, a quarter proportion was also in Europe (including Russia), while a ratio of 5% and 4% were in North America and Africa respectively, and Latin America and others were of the lower percentages being 3% each.

    In the year 2000, the world population surged up to 6 billion, being almost four folds of the 1900’s population, and in terms of the continental percentages, both Asia Pacific (including former Soviet Asia) and Europe (including Russia) decreased in their proportions but they maintained their respective spots being 54% and 14% respectively, while the ratios of Africa and Latin America and Caribbean increased significantly to 10% and 8% respectively. The percentage of Middle East and North Africa was 6%, however the proportions of North America and others remained constant at 5% and 3% respectively.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Almost quadrupled not quadruple. Asia was the most populated region in the two years not between. Was also in Europe, here also would not come. Latin America and others were of the lower percentages is wrong formation, instead Only 3% of global population resided in Latin America and Others each. Asia and Europe decreased in wrong sentence formation because these did not decrease the percentage of global population in these continents decreased, so better write the share of global population in Asia and Europe witnessed a decline in 2000 as compared to 1900, and then give the percentages. You have repeated this mistake by associating comparison words like increase and decrease with continents but these words are to used for the share of global population in these continents and not the continent itself. Please keep a note of this because this is a very common and huge mistake that students make in tasks where % is given.

  5. Haruuu says:

    There is an ongoing argument that tutors are the major stakeholders when it comes to the performances of their students, however another group of thinkers believe it is rather the actions and inactions of the students that decide their academic successfulness. I strongly opine with the latter and this essay will elaborate both views in detail.

    First of all, I will articulate my perspective on this matter and for students to be academically successful it mostly depend on the attitudes and behaviours of the students themselves regardless of the performances of their teachers without implying that tutors have no role to play. For instance, a related study which was conducted by NGO based in Ghana called Child Right Activists, from 2009 to 2014, concerning how school children from the public and private basic schools performed academically at the Senior High Schools and tertiary levels in some selected schools in Ghana, and it was revealed that majority of the excellent students at both levels were those who went to the government primary schools despite the quality of teachers and tuitions their counterparts from the private basic schools had. Furthermore, educational success can not be attained without continual practices by the individual student irrespective of how good or bad of the tutor. To explain further, one can be taught by the best teacher on the globe but without constant practices by the student of what he/she learnt, all what was taught will be in vain.

    On the contrary, some people have the opinion that academic success of students largely relied on their teachers’ performances since teachers are the front liners when it comes to impacting knowledge to school children. In addition, those in this side argued that the reason why some students performed better in some subjects than others is basically the teaching methods of the tutors who handle those subjects.

    In conclusion, even though teachers play a very significant role in the educational success of students, however my view is that students attitude is the number one priority for attaining academic success.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Instead of success fullness write success. ‘First of all, I will articulate my perspective on this matter and for students to be academically successful it mostly depend on the attitudes a’ instead of and there should be full stop and two separate sentences because the two parts before and after ‘and’ are not in continuation hence not making sense. Largely rely not relied. Impacting knowledge, I think you imparting knowledge. Those on this side not in this side, better sentence would be ‘the proponents of this argument believe that’. Students’ attitude not students attitude. Instead of number one priority use the word ‘paramount’ for attaining success. Overall it is a very good attempt. You have covered all the basics well starting from the introduction and well structured. Good job.

  6. Haruun says:

    Sir, thanks for your corrections

  7. Haruun says:

    Please in agree or disagree questions, I think it is better to state your stand and develop on it in the various paragraphs without stating the other side in any of the paragraphs or conclusion

  8. Rinal Kansara says:

    The pie charts reveal the percentage of the world population growth of two years.

    Overall,the world population was the highest in 1900 as compared to 2000.Also, Asia had maximum population in both years.

    According to the pie charts,the population growth of Asia accounted for one third of the world’s population in 1900,and experienced a 6% decrease to 54% in 2000.In contrast, contribution by other regions remained relatively constant in both years at 3%.While Latin America had 3% population in 1900,population growth of Latin America and Caribbean was 8% in 2000.Additionally,the population growth of Africa inclined from 4% in 1900 to one tenth in 2000.But,the population growth of North America was static in both years,that was 5% points.

    As per the pie charts,Eupore witnessed a quarter population in 1900 and after ten decades, it reduced and it was noticed 14% in 2000.Moreover,people did not live in Middle East and North Africa in 1900 and 6% population growth recorded in 2000.In addition,a decrease of 1billion population was noticed in 2000 than 1900.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is not the growth of population it is the distribution of global population by region. ‘the world population was the highest in 1900 as compared to 2000’ when comparing only two things higher is used not highest. You have used word growth in this task which is wrong. ‘6% decrease’ 6 percentage points decrease. ‘Eupore witnessed a quarter population’ Europe spelling wrong and witnessed is generally used in task 1 with verbs and nouns together for example Europe’s contribution to world population witnessed an increase of 11 percentage points, from 14% in 1900 to 25% in 2000.

  9. Rinal Kansara says:

    It is a fact that teacher is a backbone of the education.Since education is require in all spheres of life,it is certainly necessary for individuals to become educated.While some people believe that teachers are responsible for the great achievement of pupils,some advocate that students work faltout to take education.But,i support the former notion and in the following section both views will be discussed.

    To commence with,teachers are a boon for the society as they are highly qualified with bachelor and master degree and aware of curriculum. Therefore,they have good teaching skills, in-depth knowledge of particular subject and plenty of tricks to teach students.Secondly,teachers are builders of the nation who impart the best knowledge to students, make them aware of their own mistakes and guide proper way to make their bright future.Thus,teachers are like candles who burn it self and show light to others.To illustrate,in India,the government every year recruits teachers with Bachelor of Education degree in which teachers have learnt one year teaching training such as time management skills and all schooling systems.

    On the contrary,some students have ability of self study.Owing to that there are many online books,u tube videos and websites available on the internet which are fruitful for students. Moreover,some learners read more books ,learn everything themselves and perform well in examination.For instance,all workaholics people have been taking distance learning education from Sikkim Manipal University since 2011 and they gain knowledge with job.

    To recapitulate,although some children have sharp mind to learn everything without the help of teachers, teachers take training become they start teaching and gain more knowledge to remove illiteracy of the globe. Hence,they have a great impact on life of pupils.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘teacher is a backbone of the education’ teachers are the backbone of education system. ‘education is require’ is required. ‘work faltout’? ‘teachers are like candles who burn it self’ burn themselves since you have used plural teachers. ‘u tube videos’ u tube? ‘take training become they’ become is wrongly used here.

  10. Rinal Kansara says:

    Work falt out means I want to say that work it wrong word or spelling? They take training before they start teaching.and let me know plz u tube videos is wrong?I can’t say like this?

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