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IELTS Writing Test 3

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Task 1: The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.




Task 2: Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example form your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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112 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 3”

  1. Ayo says:

    The diagram shows the production and consumption of electricity in ten countries within the year 2014.
    The production and consumption of electricity varies in different country. The highest producer is China while the least consumer is Korea Republics.

    Most countries produced above their country need except Germany that consume more than it’s production

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Please make sure that you use the right tense. Since data is about 2014 therefore you should have written everything in past tense and not in present.

  2. Marie says:

    The diagram depicts productivity and usage of power in billion kilowatts in the top ten States in 2014.

    Overall, the Chinese had the most produced and consumed power followed by USA. Koreans reported the least in both categories while Germany used more electricity than it produced. Furthermore, Brazil reserved the most power than any other state.

    In 2014, China manufactured 5,398 billion kwh and the descripancy between the production and utilisation was only 76kwh. The United States produced 4,099 billion kwh and reserved 233 kwh. In contrast, Korea produced and utilized 485.1 and 449.5 billion kwh respectively and it recorded the least amongst all countries. On the other hand, Germany used more power (582.5 kwh) than its production (526.6kwh).

    Russians produced and consumed almost a fifth of China’s statistics.The Japanese and French had just above 78 billion kwh unused while Canadians and Indians reserved 119 and 172.2 kwh respectively. However, Brazil, one of the least ranking nations made the most reservation of electricity of 455.8 billion kwh which was the highest overall.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      In the introduction you have written states which is wrong these are countries. Always write the USA and never USA alone. Improve your sentence structure.

  3. Cornelius says:

    Over the years, there has been a debate on subject preference and importance in the society. Individuals tend to choose a subject that closely represent their interest and future career.
    some people said that History is one of the most essential subjects while others believe subjects with science and technology backing should take the lead.
    History is the study of cultural heritage and belief of a society. it covers core areas like archaeology, sociology and arts. proponents of History as one of the most important subjects believe that history gives insight to students on the following points;
    Historical setting and heritage of the society – this enables students/historians have first-hand information on how a particular heritage came into existence. example, the naming of the country, Nigeria was as a result of the discover of its biggest river, River Niger by western visitors.
    History also enables inter-cultural and ethnic association; this can be seen by the exposition of language, culture and heritage of different countries creating an avenue for association and removing boundaries.
    on the other hand, science and technology is the study of matter and its application in solving societal needs. science and technology encompasses different subjects ranging from mathematics, biology, chemistry engineering etc. proponents of this subject as the most important subject said that;
    Science and technology refined the earth – this can be seen from the different scientific discoveries that led to infrastructural and material development, e.g the discovery of elements that led to the development of pharmaceutical and chemicals.
    science and technology doesn’t have an impasse as more discoveries are made everyday, e.g recent discovery of bio-fuels that led to a reduced focus in fossil fuels and saving the ozone layer.
    All subjects have a specific role it is playing, contributing to societal development. the discovery of culture and language by Historians created a means of communication for scientists to discuss and disseminate findings. Also, Historical findings prompted scientific research, example, the discovery of artifacts like clay plates led to the study and its development into the modern stainless/ceramic plates we have today. Science and technology also has provided exceeding infrastructural, health and personal development, getting us to where we are today.
    In conclusion, all subjects are important and play a huge role in the study and development of the other and hence, none is more important than the other.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Grammatical mistake in line ‘some people said’ you are writing it in present tense so it should be ‘some people say’. Do not use ‘/’ . Do not use e.g. instead write for example. Use full form instead of doesn’t. Grammatical mistake ‘reduced focus in fossil fuels’ it should be ‘focus on’. ‘All subjects have a specific role it is playing’ this line is grammatically wrong. do not use capital h for historians it is a general term. Instead of ‘in conclusion’ write ‘to reiterate’ it is a better phrase.

  4. Son Dang says:

    Writing task 2, test 3, Cambridge 13

    People may have different views about which subject is the most important at school. Although there are good arguments in favor of Science and Technology, I believe that History is, in fact, more crucial.

    It is often argued that Science and Technology should be prioritized at school. Those fields are quickly innovated and developing in modern society, with an increasing amount of money being invested by both the government and private corporates. As a result, human resources in Science and Technology are always in high demand and the number of job opportunities in these sectors are significantly on the rise. Therefore, many people believe that children should learn more about the subjects at school to be better prepared for the need of society once they graduate.

    However, I am more in favor of History being prioritized in school curriculum. History is a great source of information about culture and society in the past, which can substantially encourage children to be proud of human achievement and aware of the issues that are still existing in modern society. For instance, many scientific researches show that children who are well-informed about history of racism will be more compassionate and get along well with other people having different backgrounds. Furthermore, History is a colossal opportunity to learn about the mistakes that we made in the past and thus avoid them in the future. If we solely focused on educating children about Science and Technology, mistakes with respect to nuclear energy that caused the deaths of million people in the past would be very much likely to be repeated in the future.

    In conclusion, while the arguments about the importance of Science and Technology are very appealing, I still think that History is much more necessary, especially at school.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Good piece of writing. You can try to write a better and a bit lengthy introduction. I see this mistake in many essays that students rephrase the statement of question in the introduction. The root cause of this problem is that all of them are watching the same videos from so called IELTS experts on youtube who teach nothing of value and impress students by rephrasing the statement and embellishing it with a couple of good words. Please I am not saying that you are one of those students but the pattern keeps repeating hence my observation. Otherwise your essay is good. Good vocabulary and points and well structured. One small grammatical mistake ‘if we solely focused on’ here focus should be written in continuation of the present tense. Again just work on a better introduction and you will definitely score good bands in writing. Thanks for availing our services.

  5. Betty says:

    TASK 1
    The bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in 10 different countries in 2014.
    Overall, according to the data,Korea rep produces and consumes the lowest amount of electricity while China consumes and produces the highest amount of electricity measured in billion kWh.
    In 2014, it is shown that China produces the highest amount of electricity with 5,398 billion kWh followed by the United States being the second largest producer while Russia,Japan and India producing roughly the same quantity(1,057,936.2 and 871 respectively) while Canada, France,Brazil,Germany and Korea produced lower quantities (618.9, 561.2,530.7,526.6 and 485.1 respectively).
    Conversely, Korea rep. consumed the lowest quantity of electricity followed by Brazil and France with billion kWh if 449.5, 455.8 and 462.9 respectively. Meanwhile Germany produces 582.5billion kWh which is slightly lower than Canada while India,Japan and Russia are roughly within the same range with consumption of 871, 856.7 and 1.038billion kWh.Although, the United States and China has the highest consumption rate than the rest of the other countries.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Dont use short forms as ‘rep’ please write Republic of Korea. And use past tense because data is of 2014 hence write produced and consumed not produces and consumes. You have repeated the same mistake repeatedly. The data is of past and you have written your task in present tense which is a major mistake.

  6. Betty says:

    TASK 1
    The bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in 10 different countries in 2014.
    Overall, according to the data,Korea rep produces and consumes the lowest amount of electricity while China consumes and produces the highest amount of electricity measured in billion kWh.
    In 2014, it is shown that China produces the highest amount of electricity with 5,398 billion kWh followed by the United States being the second largest producer while Russia,Japan and India producing roughly the same quantity(1,057,936.2 and 871 respectively) while Canada, France,Brazil,Germany and Korea produced lower quantities (618.9, 561.2,530.7,526.6 and 485.1 respectively).
    Conversely, Korea rep. consumed the lowest quantity of electricity followed by Brazil and France with billion kWh if 449.5, 455.8 and 462.9 respectively. Meanwhile Germany produces 582.5billion kWh which is slightly lower than Canada while India,Japan and Russia are roughly within the same range with consumption of 871, 856.7 and 1.038billion kWh.Although, the United States and China has the highest consumption rate than the rest of the other countries.

  7. Betty says:

    TASK 2
    History has been one of the most crucial subjects in schools. It teaches cultural values and morals. Although some individuals believe science and technology is more important than history while others believe in the contrary.
    In my opinion, history is more important than science and technology while i explain both views.
    Firstly, History should be mandated in schools because it serves as a basis for building cultural values in the sense that it helps students to know their pasts,where they originate from,Also history sheds more light to the past mistakes and some cultural taboos like incest, female vaginal mutilation which had been practiced and yet to be abolished in some countries,history reveals these facts,bringing them to limelight and civilization thereby helping in its eradication.

    In contrast, science and technology is important and should be made a part of the school curriculum because we are in the jet age, a world of fast cars,skyscrapers and condominiums which are only made available due to modern technologies, if a student has not been schooled on the rudiments of science,he or she may not be marketable that is he may find it difficult to get a job or live a comfortable life.Conversely,science serves as a bedrock to where our modern medicines innovates which has contributed immensely to health.
    In conclusion,after weighing the pros and cons of history and science and technology, i believe history is more important and should therefore be made compulsory in schools.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Sheds more light ‘to’ is wrong. Sheds more light ‘on’ is right. Introduction can be written in a better way. Instead of limelight use bringing these to the fore. ‘Them’ in this sentence is wrong them is always used for persons so use ‘these’ here. There is incoherence between in your first three paragraphs. Finish with a better conclusion.

      • neha says:

        writing
        Task-1:
        The bar chart depicts the production and consumption of the electricity in the top ten countries.
        The survey result of the year 2014 illustrates that China ranks first in the production and utilization of electricity whereas, Korea stands in the last.
        From the chart, it is obvious that USA took second position. But it reserved more electricity than china. Though china ranked first in the production of electricity, it was only able to reserve 76 billion kWh but USA reserved 233 billion kWh.
        Russia followed by USA has almost used the amount of electricity it produced. so, there is no much deviation in the figures.
        Japan and India produced 936.2 billion kWh and 871 billion kWh respectively.
        Canada has produced 618.9 billion kWh and used 499.9 billion kWh reserving 119 billion kWh. while France and Brazil has produced low quantity of electricity (561.2 billion kWh and 530.7 billion kWh respectively).
        Germany has used an additional 55.9 billion kWh of electricity than the amount it produced.
        Korea which is in the last position has produced 485.1 billion kWh and consumed 449.5 billion kWh.

        • IELTS-PTE says:

          Major mistake the task should have been written in past tense not in present tense. Instead of obvious use evident. Always use the with USA. Wrong use of word deviation.

  8. ayush rai says:

    TASK 2
    It is evident that, these days most of the people prefer science and technology to be major subject in school.However, there are some masses that have strong thought that history is the most significant subject among others. For several reasons, which I will present below, it seems to me that both subject have their own sectors of importance and are always interlinked to each other.
    It is true that, in this contemporary age people are living comfortable and happier life, which is the result of science and technology theories. For instance, people can travel from one county to other within couple of hours, shopping can be done thru mobiles and even we can do video chat with friends who are on other nation. Moreover, we made our goal to the highest ambitions, like developing the new human settlement to other planets, consequently, to fulfill such impossible desire we need lot of creative scientists. Keeping this as a major topic in school a lot of youth will be encourage to be scientists.
    Next, we should not ignore the history, which reflects the contribution of our creative ancestors in development of this modern world. As, in different newspapers historian always expresses about scientific theory from famous researcher such as Albert Einstein and Newton are the key foundation to nowadays technology advancement. Development is the process which is continuously emerging from generation to generation. For example, century ago people used horse as their best way of travelling now we have more faster and comfortable cars, buses and airplanes to go from one to another places. It appears to me that, ones cannot leave a mark in this process if do not posses good information and knowledge of experience from our ancesstors.Likewise, history is equally influential subject to be in school syllabus.
    In short, it is certainly true that one of the main subject should be science and technology in education institutions but most would not consider a successful person if he would not demonstrate his understanding on history. So history should always come as an associated subject with major science and technology.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Strong belief not thought. Sectors of importance wrong phrase. Country not county. Do not use short form ‘thru’. Will be encouraged not encourage, always use second from of verb with will be. Never start your conclusion with in short, write ‘To reiterate’.

  9. Ahmed khan wasi says:

    The bar chart presents the amount of electricity generated and utilized by ten different nations in 2014. As an overall trend, China produced and consumed maximum electricity in 2014 followed by the United States of America, whereas the least power was developed and used by Koreans, Germans, Brazilians, and French that year as compared to other six countries. Germany was the only country in 2014 among others where consumption exceeds the production rate.

    As can be observed, the production and usage of electricity were somehow the same in Russia, Korea, and China. Conversely, Germany which produced 526.6kWh of energy in 2014, consumed roughly 65 kWh more electricity. On the other hand, the difference in electricity generation and spending was relatively high in the USA.

    In contrast, France, Brazil, and Canada produced 561.2kWh, 530.7 kWh, and 618.9kWh of power in the year 2014. In terms of India and Japan, the energy consumption was 698.8Kwh and 936.2 kWh against the generation of exactly 871kWh and 936.2kWh in 2014.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You can use least with only one country. Consumption exceeded not exceeds since the data is from past. Do no use word somehow in task 1 and it is not same for Russia, Korea and China, there is small difference. When giving data for more than one countries together then write respectively at the end. In terms of India and Japan is wrong sentence formation. Please watch our video on task 1 to improve your writing. The link is given below:

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIBUOHdFKII

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  10. sharki mital says:

    Learning a variety of courses are beneficial for students to compete with others. A few people tend towards the view that history is one of the crucial subjects, whereas others think in a different way and opine that courses related to science and technology are imperative than history. There are reasonable judgments on both sides which will be discussed in this essay, followed by the writer’s opinion eventually.

    On one side of the argument, some thinkers believe that history subject taught at school and colleges is more vital because it helps students to know about their own culture and culture of other countries. For example, nation’s festival dates, national anthem, national food, and national dress are some of the things which are highly important for a student to remember and these are only taught in the history course. Another reason why the community has this belief is because of life experiences which are learned by studying history. For instance, there are plenty of real-life tales available as lessons in history books for our lives. Society can grasp immense knowledge and experience by reading the history of ancient humans.

    Turning to the other side of the view, many prefer to say that nowadays technical subjects are given more preference as compared to history. Firstly, this is mainly because subjects like physics and computer science play a significant role in solving daily life issues. To exemplify, in case of viruses students can install windows in their computers, if they have studied computer science at school or college. Secondly, in today’s world technologists and engineers have the highest salaries as compared to the politicians who studied history subjects. To illustrate, according to glassdoor’s recruitment website, engineer’s monthly average income in most of the countries is USD 2,000 in contrast to the economists who get USD 1500/month.

    In conclusion, although history has more important, on balance, I strongly agree that technical subjects are much decisive due to fringe benefits.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Please watch this video carefully on our official youtube channel on how to write task 2 to better your attempt.

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A0_23FBCnMY

      Do not write writer’s opinion because it talks about third person but you have to give your opinion that is first person. You need to work a lot on vocabulary because in your attempt there is hardly any good words. Please watch our videos on vocabulary as well if you want 7+ bands in writing. Conclusion also in improper. The ideas in the body paragraphs need to be better and strong. You do not do something for fringe benefits because fringe means very small benefits.

  11. Prasanna says:

    Education has branched off to many interesting disciplines like science and technology, arts, history and school students choose the field according to their interest. some are of the view that science and technology is of more value than history while others hold the reverse view. I will discuss both views in the following paragraphs and more inclined to think science and technology is of paramount importance yet history should also be included in school curriculum.

    Science and technology has brought marvels to the humans so that we enjoy better lives than our ancestors did. Great inventions in the field of communication, transport, health have made both life easier and longer for most of the people. Hence, letting students study in these fields may improve the future lives better as more and more people will be interested and hence engaged in these fields . If the students lack interest in science and move more into subjects like history they would be a burden to society as in our country where many art graduates remain jobless as they are not experts in any useful craft.

    While many people support the above opinion still others think that learning history is of more importance. Students who lack the knowledge of history of their own country is less patriotic and may lack the drive to move the country forward as they have nothing to take pride of, according to this view. For example, if somebody wants to become a citizen in USA, he or she must have to possess adequate knowledge of that country, as the authorities of that country believe knowledge of history is very important.

    Considering both views,in conclusion, i would like to stress my view that school students should be taught more science subjects but history should be taught to a certain extent as they should not forget their roots.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Do not use paramount and importance together because paramount means important. Improve the future lives better is wrong because improve means better. Avoid using strong negative arguments like burden on society, it is something which we mentioned in our video on Task 2. Students are not is (lack the knowledge). Always use the with USA.

  12. annie says:

    Some people believe history as the crucial subject in school, while others consider Science & Technology to be even more important in the current world. In my opinion, I believe that History is essential to learn the culture and tradition, whereas Science is more useful to be up to date with the daily advancement in the technology.

    On the one hand, many think it is the knowledge of our history helping in retaining our tradition and culture. In this developing and fast paced society traditional values are losing its importance. History is slightly boring to read, but teaches great lessons and various methods to deal with certain shortcomings in life. Children needs to inculcate such values from an early age of life which are beneficial for their future .

    On the other hand,having knowledge in science and technology keeps one ahead than those who are technically challenged. Technology is changing daily and to keep up the pace one needs to be up to date. Including science in curriculum will prove to be a boon for students as the world is becoming more and more dependent on technology. In this world of modernisation even a slightest task, such as switching on air-conditioner can be done remotely.

    Finally, in my opinion, whether needing history as an important subject or science, depends on the student and their future goal. Student who is born to excel in science was given inadequate knowledge on science in childhood will not have a desired success and vice versa.

    In conclusion, getting a maximum output requires a balanced knowledge of the history and science. Students should obtain more skills required to be sure of success in particular field, history or science.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Please first watch this video on our official youtube channel on how to attempt task 2 and then submit again because in this attempt your introduction is not proper which will reduce you band score. Also watch the vocabulary videos and try to incorporate the words used in those videos for higher band scrore.

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A0_23FBCnMY

  13. Haruna Adamu says:

    The bar chart provides information about ten developed countries in how much they produced and consumed electrical energy in 2014. The unit is in billion kwh. Overall, Republic of China was the highest producer and consumption of electricity, followed by the United State while the other eight countries production and consumption of electricity were far below that of the two countries, however, all the countries were able to consume the amount of electricity they produced with surpluses except Germany, which they consumed more than they produced.
    From the chart, China produced 5,398 billion kwh and consumed 5,322 billion kwh of electric power, which makes it the first in both production and consumption of electricity. The United State came second with 4,099 and 3,866 billion kwh of being production and consumption respectively, followed by Russia, which also produced 1,057 billion kwh and consumed 1,038 billion kwh.
    Japan,India,Canada,France and Brazil produced and consumed less than 1000 billion kwh each , however, the consumption of electricity by Germany was higher than its production being 582.5 and 526.6 respectively. The least country was Korea republic being 485.1 of production and 449.5 in consumption.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘in’ is redundant in the first line. Instead write information for ten countries about how much these. Also do not use they for countries, they is always used for persons. Highest producer and consumer not consumption. United States not State. Eight countries’ not countries. Again they with Germany is wrong. From the chart what?. The least country was Korea is grammatically wrong. Instead write the least amount electricity generated was in Korea. Also avoid repetition of words. You have used produced and consumed repeatedly, instead of produced use generated, and consumed write exhausted.

  14. Charles says:

    Curriculums of schools are in a continual phase of evolution. In recent times, there has been a rapid growth in science and technology, hence the opinion of making it a core subject to be incorporated into the course outline of every school. An opinion which I firmly support, though there are those who believe history rather than science and technology should be the most vital subject amongst other courses offered in schools.
    History is a fascinating subject that tells us about events that happened in the past. It tells us stories, showing us in retrospect the motivation behind many great discoveries and breakthroughs in both art, politics even in science and technology. This motivation guides researchers and inventors in our time to make greater inventions and strides in their various fields. Thus while I believe it should not be a core subject, it must not be discarded.
    Science and technology on the other hand, has paved the way for so many discoveries, developments and improved quality of life. For instance, with the invention of electricity, rail roads, vehicles, computers and many other technological devices, life has been made easy in many ways both communication, business, time management and transportation. Breakthrough in science and technology has saved so many lives. For example, the discovery of penicillin by Sir Alexander Fleming in the 19th century, an antibiotic that came to the rescue at a time when a particular bacteria threatened survival and the discovery of vaccines against viral infections that increased infant mortality rate. These discoveries has certainly improved the average life span of individuals and given us hope of a sustainable future.
    To sum up, although I support the opinion that science and technology is made a vital subject, history should not be discarded but be incorporated into the curriculum to show students the importance of leaving a mark on the world through their inventions and discoveries.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your ending is introduction is not proper because you have not mentioned what will be discussed later. Please watch the video we shared carefully because introduction and conclusion are very important to score good bands in writing. Your English is very good and you can easily score 7+ in writing if you meet all the evaluation parameters highlighted in our video. Try to avoid repeating words for example you have used word discarded twice instead you can use it should not be belittled or neglected. Your writing style is also good. Just focus on key points highlighted in our video and we are confident you will score at least 7 bands in writing. Keep it up!

  15. Sayali Vaidya says:

    It is a universally accepted fact that students should learn the subject History in their schooling, so universities have made it a mandatory subject. So, in no sense, we can ignore it. But, nowadays people are more attracted to subjects like Science and technology where there are a lot of opportunities. Moreover, Technology is advancing by leaps and bounds and hence subjects like Science and technology are assumed to be more crucial than history.

    The curriculum of each university has given the equal weightage of marks for both the subjects History and Science and technology. It is a very important factor for students to know the history of our medieval period, facts about the greatest leaders, important dates to remember, such as Independence Day, Republic Day, etc. On the contrary, Science and technology teach students regarding the advancement of different technologies, theories, concepts, new discoveries. This gives students the opportunity to learn new things. For instance, mobile phones have made each and everyone’s life very easy and comfortable. In addition to this, the mobile phone has also made very easy communication all over the universe.

    On the other hand, after learning Science and Technology in schooling, most of the students choose a specialization in Science faculty. On the grounds that, Science faculty has a wide range of opportunities to enhance one’s career.

    Therefore, in my opinion, though Science and technology is a far-reaching subject we cannot dodge History subject.

    I would be happy enough if u give me a Band Score. Thanks in advance.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      History with small h not capital H. Your introduction is not proper because it does not clearly introduces the task and does not tell what will be discussed in the later part of the essay. Please watch our youtube lesson on task 2 and learn how to make a proper and impressive introduction because introduction is the most important part of your essay and sets the tone and impression in the mind of the examiner which decides your final band score. On the contrary discusses opposite view therefore it should begin with a new paragraph, discuss only one opinion or one side in one paragraph which gives your essay better structure and clarity otherwise examiner might get the impression that the student is confused and not clear about the task. Your English is correct but lack good words so work on including better vocabulary. Conclusion is too short giving the essay an abrupt ending. Please watch our task 2 lesson on youtube entirely and learn how to end your essay properly. This essay will get you maximum 6 bands.

  16. thanu says:

    The chart presents production and consumption of electricity in the highly-ranked countries in the year 2014.
    Overall, the highest amount of electricity was produced by China (5398 kWh) and the lowest proportion of electricity was produced in the Korea(449.5 kWh)
    According to this chart, the US has got the second place.Its production is more slightly than consumption of electricity.Moreover,there was a quite difference between production and consumption of Russia.Both of the production and consumption of electricity dropped dramatically from Japan to Brazil.But, in the Germany,consumption of electricity(582.5 kWh) was higher than its production(526.6 kWh).

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your task is of only 94 words which is unacceptable. Task one should be ideally in the range of 150-170 words. So please attempt again with the correct word count.

  17. thanu says:

    People have different views about which subject is the most important at school .As a preferable subject, Science and Technology could change even world.I believe that History is the most important which means that anyone can’t live without a foundation.
    Frankly speaking, in the past the world was alone.Because, people did not have a progress of technology.As the students, they should have a knowledge about the beginning of the world.For an example, communication is close to the history.First, people was unable to convey with others.Therefore they have to act it by using body language.After they used to learn sign language to express their ideas.After the developing peoples’ minds, they try to invent new experiments.As a results of it, the telephone was invented by Alexander Grahambell. It was a great service to convey with community of the world.This is the history of the communication and anything can not create without a foundation.On other hand, every country has a history which helps to understand the past level of political, economical, educational background of a country.Moreover, all of people have an own cultural system and traditional background.They were begun by our grandparents.If not, we will not have a this kind of process of the culture.

    When we focus about the Science and Technology has developed day by day. The world was alone in the past.After progress of technology of technology, the world has come closer us now.If people can not connect with the the world, there are no social media throughout the world.Therefore,scientists try to make new experiments.For an example, television, radio, telephone, motor car and aeroplane were invented by our past scientist.They are more useful evils even today.But I think, all of aspects have a great history.As well as, beginning of the people ‘s lives not a simple thin. It relates according to their past behaviour. That’s why history is more important than other subjects.

    In my opinion,all of people had an elementary level in the past.Without knowing it, they can not uplift the future of the next generation. Therefore, history is not a traditional subject. Actually, it is a developing subject with the time.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your introduction is still not correct because it does not introduce the task and what you want to achieve through this. Please watch our video on task 2 carefully and write the introduction again because without proper introduction you cannot get good bands. We will first work on your introduction to get it right and then we will gradually move towards the later part of the essay. But first things first, go watch that video and make a better and correct introduction.

  18. thanu says:

    sir, my exam is on 1st June 2019.I need 6.0 for writing.Can I get it?

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Surely you can get just keep practicing and incorporating our feedback and watch our writing lessons repeatedly, the more you watch the more you learn.

  19. thanu says:

    sir are there any mistakes in my writing task 1? please explain about it .Although,there are 100 words in the chart, what band score you can get me?

  20. Sayali Vaidya says:

    Deat team,
    I have given a response for writing-test-3 Task2 yesterday. May I know when should I expect a reply.

    Thanks for your work.

  21. thanu says:

    thanks sir for your great service.It’ useful

  22. Pp says:

    There has been a controversial topic on what the most significant subject is. Some school of thought believe that science and technology subject is the most crucial in our society today. However, others hold the view that history is more pertinent. In my opinion, I agree that science and technology is better than history. This essay will discuss both views.
    One reason why people believe that science and technology subject is vital in our world rather than history is that it has helped produce enormous transformation and I agree. The innovation created by science and technology courses has made lives easier and faster. For instance, in the past, people could not travel long miles to visit their loved ones, but with the invention of planes and ships, people can move from one country to another in a short amount of time. In addition, the knowledge of applied and practical subject has helped to improve communication globally. Many development such as mobile phones and the internet has given millions of people access to numerous information in the comfort of their homes. It is therefore important for people to have a profound knowledge in science and technology subjects because it will propagate more scientific breakthrough which will make the world a better place.

    On the other hand, people opine that history is more significant in our world. This is because the knowledge of history helps to make better decisions from past mistakes that can improve a country. For example, the holocaust has helped people see the danger of wars, and many countries are ensuring there is never a repeat. History helps to prevent identity crisis, due to globalization, many people have forgotten their custom and tradition. The introduction of history subject as helped people to understand their individual beliefs and way of life. This has directly benefited the country through tourism, whereby people all over the world travel to see different cultural displays.

    In conclusion, while there are varying opinion on what subject is considered important. I believe that science and technology is more essential in today’s world than history.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your starting should have been better it is not a good line to start with, you could have written like ‘There is an ongoing debate that which subject is more important and should be focused more in school curriculum.’ A good starting line sets the tone for good band score. Instead of agree use the word concur. Your English is good and you can easily score 7 bands in writing. Just work on making better introduction and conclusion because conclusion is too short.

  23. Anjali says:

    Studying history in the school has been an heated topic which is constantly preying on the minds of millions of people .Some educational theorists argue that learning science and technology tend to play a crucial role in the students curriculum than historical subjects in this contemporary world ,while other individuals argue that the latter subject plays its majority in shaping the students in the sphere of education. In this essay , both the aspects of argument will be cited before drawing up the conclusion .

    To start with, science and technology is the corner stone of the modern world.Incorporating this science subjects in school subjects yeilds tremendous benefits to the students which contribute overall professional growth of students.Secondly,indulgence in learning this interesting subject brings out the creativity in pupil’s perception which ultimately boosts one’s confidence level in mastering their courses.Finally,advances in science and tecnology promotes way to success in achieving innovative solutions to solve the problem such as finding appropriate ways of living in mars,accessibilty to every individual for space travel and so on in near future

    However,on the other hand some theorists put forward their arguments in the notion of adding history subjects in the field of academics .Firstly ,learning history renders huge benefits to individual and the host community. It gives broader aspects of several incidents of past decades which assists us to gain knowledge and insight into upcoming future to plan accordingly.The most striking example is that acquiring the history behind every country’s independence and the tradedy of world wars in which so many citizens had sacrificed their lives for the benefit of host country harmony , peace and stability ultimately leads to increase in one’s patriotism .
    In a nutshell ,it seems to me that both the subjects highly influences students growth that historical subjects as well as subjects like science and technology are like two peas in a pod ,renders numerous benefits to the individual and the society as a whole .I would assert that local bureaucrats to launch a full scale investigation into this matter and
    thereby ensuring the benefits of learning history in their subjects.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your essay is too long, no examiner will check your complete essay, it should not be more than 320 words so make it concise and submit again.

  24. Anjali says:

    Studying history in the school has been the heated topic which is constantly preying on the minds of millions of people . Some educational theorists argue that learning science and technology tend to play a crucial role in the students curriculum than history subject in this contemporary world. In this essay ,both the aspects of argument will be discussed before drawing up the conclusion.

    To start with, science and technology is the corner stone of the modern world being incorporated in school curriculum yields tremendous benefits to the students which contributes student’s overall professional growth and brings out the creativeness. Secondly,advancement in science and technology promotes way to key success in achieving innovative solutions to solve the problems such as finding ways of living in Mars and space travel in the near future.
    However on the other hand,some educational theorists has put forward their arguments in the notion of adding history subjects in the school academics.Firstly ,indulgence in learning history renders huge benefits to individual about traditional languages and cultures of the entire world. Broader aspects of gaining knowledge in the incidence of past decades and compare it with the current scenario.The most striking example is that learning the history behind every country’s independence and the sufferings during World wars who had sacrificed their life for Nation’s peace,stability and harmony.
    In a nutshell,it seems to me that both the subjects highly influences students growth where history as well as science and technology are like two peas in one pod, which renders numerous benefits to the individual and the society as a whole .I would assert that local bureaucrats to launch a full scale investigation into school curriculum and ensuring the benefits of learning history in the school .

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You need to end the introduction by giving your own opinion since the essay statement specifically asks for it. Cornerstone is one word not two separate words. The beginning of second paragraph is incoherent, starting from cornerstone of the world then being incorporated in curriculum abruptly, these two should be written in separate sentences since this sentence is not making any sense. Avoid repeating words such as educational theorists, instead use the words luminaries. ‘Arguments in the notion of’ is not the right way to write since argument and notion have similar meaning, that is what one person thinks or believes. Their lives not life. Nation should be with small n. Do not use this phrase in a nutshell some examiners consider it informal, better to use ‘To reiterate’. Subjects highly influence not influences since subjects are plural.

  25. anjali says:

    how much score will u give me for this essay after rectifying my mistakes by including the opinion in the introduction and other things as u said .thanks

  26. debby says:

    The bar chart has shown the production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014 across ten countries.

    It was noticed that China produced more electricity in that year while Korea produced the lowest.
    It was seen that among the ten countries Korea produced less electricity and consumed about 93% of their total production and it is almost the same across the countries except Germany that concemed more that teir total production in that year.
    China produced the highest electricity and consumed about 99% of their production probably due to their rapid increase in population and manufacturing industries.
    it is also noticed that Canada produce more than what they produced unlike Germany that consumed more than their production.
    Russia consumed about 98% of their production while India only consumed 73% of their production in that year.
    Overall China has the highest production and consumption rate while korea has the lowest production and consumption in the year 2014.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You have used present tense in the last line of this task which is a huge mistake since data is of past. Introduction is also incorrect right way to write – The bar chart highlights the production—-. Korea produced less, instead write produced the least amount of electricity. concemed? Avoid repetition of words for example instead of writing produced again write generated and for consumed you can use the word exhausted. Canada produce, again present tense wrong. You have used percentages for entire task which is wrong because the main units in the graph are kwh so it should be used more than %. Please watch our tutorial on task 1, it will help you immensely to improve your next attempt.

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIBUOHdFKII

  27. Jagmeet kaur says:

    The given bar chart explaines the production and consumption of electricity by China, United States,Russia,Japan,India,Canada,France,Brazil,Germany and Korea in the year 2014.

    overall, we can easily see that China and United States are two countries that produce and consume the most of the electricity at the same time. whereas Germany,Korea makes the least power.

    China became the first country that produce more power about 5,398 billion KWh in 2014 but at the same time it consumed more then half of the power that it make that is about 5,3200 billion kWh. the same pattern is followed by United State, where it also consume most part of its production.Furthermore,Russia comes in third and Japan in fourth rank in production and consumption of electricity.

    Interestingly,India and Canada became the country that save atleast 100 billion Kwh in consumption. Out of all the 10 countries, Germany is the only country that produce less but consume more electricity in 2014. on the contrary Korea is the country that produce less electricity then all countries.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      explaines spelling mistake. Always use the with United States You have used present tense in overall, produce and consume, a mistake which you repeat and is a big mistake because clearly data is from past. Please note that majority of the task 1 are from past hence past tense would be used not present. Do not make your own conclusions such as China became the first country, simply state that China produced the highest amount of electricity among all the countries mentioned in the graph. Again ‘it make’ present tense, you really need to take a note of this be very carefully while writing verbs and using the right tense for the verbs. Avoid repetition of words for example in the entire task you have used two words repeatedly – produce and consume – which are given in the statement itself hence shows your lack of lexical resources which is a big reason for lower band score in writing. Instead of produce you can generated and for consumed you can use exhausted.

  28. Jagmeet kaur says:

    Some people believe that history is very important hence it should be school made compulsary in school, while others feel that Science and Technology should be given more preference than history.

    History plays a very important part in everyones life.It is the only thing that connect us with our past.It gives us the idendity that we are today. Students learn about the culture and can understand the prestigious events that took place in past which in result shaped the present that we are living in. If the history subject is not there then how can we imagine our youth will understant the mistakes and positive thing happened in past and can learn from them.

    On the contrary, we cannot deny the importance of science,technology. the world has reached to moon and to stay in compitition more emphasise should be made in this subject.I strongly believe in this .It will help the nation in the way that more doctors will be available in our own country that there will be no need to the patient to go abroad for treatment when they can have all that things in home country same thing goes with technology.this will not only better their life style but on the bigger picture it will help the nation. we dont need to depened on other countries infact we can provide other countries with our technology.

    In the conclusion ,I can say that both subjects have their own importance but today we need more scientist,doctors,technicians in order to make our life and our world more advance.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You need to word on your introduction because it is the most important part of the essay. You have simply rephrased the essay statement a mistake very common among students. Also you did not mention what is the task in your introduction and what will be discussed in the essay. Please watch our tutorial on task 2 and learn how to make an impressive introduction and make a good first impression in the mind of the examiner. ‘be school made compulsary in school,’spelling of compulsory is wrong and school is repeated in the sentence which should not be the case. Everyone’s life not everyones life. That connects us not connect. Science and technology not science, technology. Spelling of competition is wrong. Emphasis should be made on this subject not in this subject. ‘It will help the nation in the way that more doctors will be available in our own country that there will be no need to the patient to go abroad for treatment when they can have all that things in home country same thing goes with technology’ Break it into three separate sentences instead of using that to connect sentences. Better attempt as compared to previous ones but still needs a lot of improvement. And do not forget to watch the task 2 tutorial carefully to improve your future attempts. The link is given below.

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A0_23FBCnMY

  29. RINAL KANSARA says:

    The bar graph reveals the production and uses of electricity by several countries in the year of 2014.
    Overall,the figure of both,utilization and consumption of electricity witnessed the completely downward trend.
    According to the graph,China engendered 5,398 billion kwh electricity whereas production declined slightly 4,099 billion kwh in the United States.Afterwards,the pattern of electricity generation drastically went down South 1057 billion kwh in Russia and it slide down smoothly from 936.2 billion kwh in Japan to 526.6billion kwh in Germany.Subsequently, production of electricity hit the low point 485.1 billion kwh in Korea,Rep.
    As per the data,there was 5,322 billion kwh electricity consumption in China, while electricity utilization dwindled 3,866 billion kwh in the United States.Then,the figure of electricity consumption dramatically fell down 1038 billion kwh in Russia and it plunged smoothly from 856.7 billion kwh to 582.5 billion kwh in the following six countries namely Japan,India,Canada,France,Brazil,Germany.After that,uses of electricity touched the bottom,449.5 billion kwh in Korea,Rep.(sir let me know is there any gramatical mistake and sentence formation)

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is consumption not uses, there is slight difference between these two words so better use the one mentioned in the task if you are not sure. In overall you have written downward trend but you cannot say this because trend is when you compare similar things for example if data has been for one country only then you could say that there is downward trend, here it is comparison between production and consumption for different countries. Again production declined in the US, you cannot write like this because you do not whether in the US production declined or increased as compared to previous year since data is not given, instead you can write ‘in the US the production of electricity was lower as compared to China’. Again you have used the word pattern, please understand there is no pattern here, pattern means when you have data for same thing for more than one or two years, but here individual data is given for each country for just one year. In this task you have to focus on just two things – production and consumption in each country separately. For production you can use the word generated and for consumption you can use exhausted instead of uses, because uses means how you use something for example electricity is used for running trains, machines etc.

  30. Rinal kansara says:

    There is no denying that, several subjects are certainly pivotal during schooling.Since nowadays in modern era,technology is proliferating at a startling pace across the globe,people have scarce interest in learning history.While some individuals advocate that knowledge of the history is certainly prerequisite,others believe that science and technology plays vital role.But,I support the later one notion.
    To commence with,in-depth knowledge of science and technology paves the way for shiny future.Furthermore, maximum organization with handsome perks are relied on technology because they are invented electronic gadgets which have absolutely changed the life of individuals such as mobile phones,home appliances,laptop. Secondly,science encourage pupils to do further research which are fruitful for human beings.Owing to,there are plenty of scientists who have found out the medicines,vaccines to alleviate fatal diseases such as cancer,asthama,heart transplant and these exploration assist people to escalate life expectancy.To illustrate,every school have been celebrating the environment day on 5th June by planting trees since many years.

    On the contrary, monument is an identity of the country.Therefore,history aware of students about their own culture,traditional,customs,language as well as it attracts to visit monuments such as Taj Mahal of Agra,well known museums and life of their ancestors.
    To recapitulate,while subjects of history give knowledge about historical periods and struggle of fight fighters, science and technology is essential because it has holistically changed the world and made life convenient.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is a much better introduction as compared what you generally write, excellent improvement. Two mistakes here, first I support the latter not later, its former and latter, later means something which is done late or after sometime, second you did not mention that you will discuss both views in the essay as mentioned in the statement. Instead of shiny write bright future. You can write maximum, because maximum is an extreme word which you should be sure of, instead write majority of organisations and ‘are relied’ is grammatically wrong it should be ‘rely on’. Again same mistake ‘they are invented’ it should be ‘these have invented’ also take not they is always used for human beings not for objects so these would come here. Science encourages not encourage, singular hence ‘s’, ‘es’ with verb would come here. Owing to this not owing to. History apprises students of, instead of history aware of students about. Subject of history not subjects. ‘fight fighters’?

  31. RINAL KANSARA says:

    these have invented ?is is correct?or all this organizations have invented?history apprises students about their own culture.is it correct? sir someone told me to use passive voice so i wrote that they are relied on…..but sir i dont know where i can use passive voice?and is it true to use passive voice and get good score in exam?bcz i believe to write simple and gramatically correct which i know.i do not want to write which i can not do.in speaking also.i m trying to do all gramatical correct

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Yes these have invented is correct. There is no rule that you have to write in passive voice whoever told you that clearly has not idea what he or she is talking about, and if your local IELTS trainer has said that then we know what you are facing. The first goal in writing and speaking is to write and speak correct and then go for advanced English. Please if you are following any local institute trainer, then please ask him or her if ‘they are relied on’ is grammatically correct or not, and if he or she says that it is grammatically correct then you need to immediately forget everything taught by this teacher because if the trainer does not know the basic rules of grammar then that trainer is hurting your rather than helping you.

  32. Rinal kansara says:

    Sir I have never taken classes.in my 1st exam also.i was following only u and still I follow u.i m not telling u that u r wrong sir.sorry if u felt bad.i was asking u question sir.and I always write my all mistakes in book which u tell me.l local trainer just want money.they never tell mistakes and how to improve writing.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      NO NO you got us completely wrong. We are not mad or upset and why would we be angry. In fact we are happy that you are asking questions because if you do not ask questions then how would you improve. We only meant that we know the standard of local trainers that is why we said that if you are following any local trainer so please make sure that he or she is a good one. And please there is no need to be sorry

  33. Rinal kansara says:

    Sir this was my 2nd attempt of ielts exam.1st time I got 5.5 in last August and at that time when I started to go classes I was empty.i was totally aware of English.and I went for 3months and they didn’t teach me anything sir.after that I gave gre exam and visa interview for usa.and again started preparation my self.i have improved everything my self sir.using u tube videos and writing bcz of u.before that I asked to my tutor 10000 times what should I do for writing improvement but he didn’t tell me anything.bcz they don’t have knowledge.i want 6.5 overall and I want to go for January intake.and I know my self sir how I got 6 bands.i worked like mad 3 months.and I really appreciate you.it is difficult to get tutor like u sir.bcz u give report of mistakes.amd people Learn everything from mistakes.sir is it your photo in ur I’d?

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      We really admire the hard working students like you because most of the students just want to score bands but are not willing to put in the effort for it. If you are aiming at overall 6.5 then make sure that you try to score the maximum in listening and reading because these two modules can be really high scoring and can cover for any shortfall in writing and speaking modules. And yes this is the pic of our head of the team at IELTS MASTER and YouTube channel English With D.

  34. Rinal kansara says:

    Sir my reading is poor.i got 5.5 in reading.but I m trying to improve speaking.i got 6 and I m trying to take 7.i daily speak for 1 hr and I listen again my own recording.and I try to speak everything grammatical correct. I also do reading
    But I don’t have more hope.so I m trying to do Lws these 3 modules correct.i have listed voice only on u tube so I asked about picture.

  35. Preetham says:

    The bar chart gives the information about production and consumption of electricity in 2014 by the top 10 countries.
    Overall,China was ranked 1st for the amount of Production and Consumption of electricity among the top 10 countries.While Korea took the last place among the top 10 list. Followed by China,United States was the only country to come close to China in terms of production and consumption, rest of the countries had a minimal difference between them.
    China had the highest production i.e 5,398 billion kwh and Consumption i.e 5,322 billion kwh of electricity in 2014.Furthermore Korea had the least Production i.e 485.1 billion kwh and Consumption i.e 449.5 billion kwh of electricity in 2014.The United States was ranked 2nd with 4,099 and 3,866 billion kwh of Production and Consumption of electricity.Followed by the United States Russia was ranked 3rd, Japan was 4th, India was 5th, Canada was 6th, France was 7th, Brazil was 8th and Germany was 9th.
    The countries which had nearly the same amount of Production and Consumption of electricity included China 5,398-5,322 ,Russia 1,057-1,038 ,Germany 526.6-582.5 and Korea 485.1-449.5. Germany is the only country to have more Consumption i.e 582.5 billion than Production i.e 526.6 billion of electricity among the listed countries. Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil had a difference over 100 billion kwh in Production and consumption,while the United States had the highest difference in Production and Consumption around 200 billion kwh among the top 10 ranked countries.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Do not write 1st, write first. Production and consumption should be with small p and c, not capital P and C. Always write ‘the’ with United States. Never write short forms like i.e. Try to bring variety in your sentence structure, your sentences are similar and repetitive which will not get you higher bands in writing. Please watch our tutorial and learn how we have compared similar things with different sentence structure in each instance. The link is given below:

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rDiZwqY3Bg0

  36. Carmela says:

    Hi, can I have a feedback? Thank you teacher.

    The bar chart reveals the amount of electricity consumed and produced, expressed in billion kWh, for the top ten countries in 2014.

    In the first three position we can find China, the United States and Russia. However, even if Russia was placed third in terms of production and consumption, we can notice that the gap with figures of China and the United States was impressive.
    Apart from Russia, in 2014 all the remaining seven countries failed to exceed 1,000 billion kWh, either in production nor in consumption.

    China and United States were the best producers of electricity with respectively 5,398 and 4,099 billion kWh, while Korea Republic, Germany and Brazil were the worst three. As regards consumption figures it is clear from the data that Germany, despite being in ninth position, consumed more than Canada, that was seventh.
    In fact, Germany was the only one country who consumed more electricity than it produced.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘either in production nor in consumption’ you mean neither? always use the with United States which you missed in third paragraph. You cannot use best and worst with more than one country because best or worst is always one. Your sentence formation is very simple and you need to learn to make complex sentences. For improvement in your writing style please watch our tutorials on how to attempt task 1 and how to make complex sentences. The links to the tutorials are given below:

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIBUOHdFKII

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d40L74n4JLY

  37. bonnie says:

    The bar chart presents an analysis of manufacture and usage of electricity in top ten countries in 2014.
    Overall, most of the countries products electricity more than consuming it, however only Germany illustrates different trend.

    China and the United States showed the highest and second productivity volume and utilization of electricity with 5.398, 5,322, 4,099 and 3,866 billion k Wh, respectively. while, the republic of Korea represented the lowest its manufacture and consumption with only around 485.1, 229,5 billion k Wh.

    When comparing 9 countries : China, the United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil, although these countries had noticeable different value between production and consumption of electricity, all of these countries’s productivity volume of electricity were higher than its usage. Those different values can be seen 76, 233, 19.6, 79.5, 172.2, 119, 98.3 and 74.9 billion k Wh, respectively in sequence of the ranking.Whereas, German production of electricity was lower than its utilization by 55.9 billion k Wh. In other words, only Germany was the exceptional trend in top ten countries about comparison between production and consumption.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘countries products electricity’ produced not products. You have used present tense which is wrong. ‘5.398, 5,322, 4,099 and 3,866 billion k Wh, respectively’ this is wrong way to write because you have mixed two components here production and consumption, write these separately. kwh should be written without space. ‘When comparing 9 countries : China, the United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil, although’ grammatically incorrect and no need to name all the countries. Never write so many numbers in one sentence this will confuse the examiner.

    • BOnnie says:

      Thank you for replying
      so what about structure? is it fine?

  38. Aakarsh Goel says:

    Task1
    The bar chart represents information on the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014, where a unit means 1 billion kWh.
    It depicts that China and the United States were the leading countries in production as well as consumption of electricity, whereas Brazil, Germany, and Korea were at the bottom.
    All the countries were producing enough electricity, according to their consumption. The exception was Germany, which produced 10 percent less than the actual consumption requirement.

    China and the United States together produced more than 50 % of the total electricity produced by the top 10 countries, that established a wide range of electric production between the countries.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You have written only 111 words which is unacceptable. No matter how good your essay is if your word count is below 150 you will never get good bands. So meet the word limit and submit again.

      • Aakarsh Goel says:

        Task 1
        Now is it fine?

        The bar chart represents information on the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014, where a unit means 1 billion kWh.

        It depicts that China and the United States were the leading countries in production as well as consumption of electricity, whereas France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea were at the bottom.
        Russia, Japan, India, Canada were at the intermediate level. In India and Canada, the electricity utilization was least around 70-80 percent. All the countries were producing enough electricity, according to their consumption. The exception was Germany, which produced 526.6 billion kWh, that is roughly 10 percent less than the actual consumption requirement 582.5 billion kWh.

        China and the United States together produced more than 50 % of the total electricity produced by the top 10 countries, that established a wide range of electric production between the countries. Maximum production and consumption were 5398 and 5322 billion kWh, and minimum were 485.1 and 449.5 respectively.

        • IELTS MASTER says:

          ‘Russia, Japan, India, Canada’ India and Canada. Least cannot be used with both India and Canada because the lowest which could be one only. You have used present tense ‘is’ which is wrong. Overall it is a good attempt.

  39. Akshay says:

    Task 2 -Kindly suggest what improvements are required.

    We humans grow and learn everything based on our past experiences. We continuously make mistakes and gradually build a mindset from not letting them happen again. Since we have a lot of crucial decisions to be made in a single life that, we can’t afford to go through that feedback system every time. Learning again and again from oversights in decision making would be unreasonable. That’s where History comes into play.

    History is a vital subject which makes us understand how we humans have been evolving since the inception of our existence.
    It incorporates all movements, revolutions, acts, civilizations, and wars which; with time altered traditions, beliefs, and complacent ideologies of different social groups. That information had been significantly improving our discretion by providing knowledge of past successes and failures.

    In the modern world, people who believe in science and technology, debate on the need for teaching History as the primary subject in the schools, neglecting its real importance. They feel that if the internet is there, then what is the need of remembering past facts? Yes, one didn’t need to remember all of the information but should be aware of the most relevant points it contains. That could even train our mind to achieve unconscious competence in the decision-making process. Pick any successful person in any field, if you interact with them; you’ll find that they acquire a profound knowledge of past events in their domain.

    Technology has always improved and upgraded with the help of History. For new invention, concepts applied could be a modification in a century-old theory. Everything in this world is connected, and a single thing can’t fulfill the need solely.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Never use short forms like can’t and That’s. You did not mention what is exactly the task and what will be discussed in the essay this is called improper ending of introduction. There should not be ; after which. Your English is good however you need to work on making better introduction and conclusion. Please watch our tutorial on task 2 it will apprise you about how to make proper introduction and conclusion. The link to the tutorial is given below:

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A0_23FBCnMY

  40. hatoon says:

    TASK 2
    Recently people have been divided into two sides, those who believe that teaching history in schools is the most important topic, while others believe that science and technology are more significant. This essay will discuss both arguments in detail and why they complement each other in my opinion.

    It is often believed that history is essential subject because studying the history of the humankind can make us better understand the human behavior, therefore learn from their mistakes, which aids in our development and leads us to a brighter future. For example, humans learned from their past that change is inevitable and to improve and survive in this world we need to adapt to our surroundings. From the beginning of the humankind species, we never stopped the observe, learn, and adapt cycle, which helped us survive and evolve to what we are right now.
    on the other hand, it is argued by some people that science and technology are key subjects in school, since they are considered the tools that help to reach the peak of civilization, if we want the improvement of the human lives, it is most to give great importance in teaching science and technology, they help in nearly all aspect of our lives, one of the major aspects is the medicine and healthcare. Technology and science have tremendously improved the lives of many patients.
     
    To conclude with my opinion, both arguments are essential subjects but a great emphasis should be put toward science and technology for it is as mentioned previously the tool that helps in the development of our civilization, while we also should teach students how history is part of our improvement and those who do not learn from their past does not have a future.
     

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘humankind species’ instead write only mankind. ‘we never stopped the observe’ stopped to observe. there should not be a comma after learn. ‘adapt cycle’ adapt according to cycle. ‘it is most to give great importance in teaching’ it is most to give, this part is grammatically incorrect also your sentence is too long from the starting of the second paragraph with many commas, try to break it down into two separate sentences. ‘both arguments are essential subjects’ arguments should not come here. ‘should be put toward science’ should be put on science.

  41. Mash says:

    The bar graph illustrates the ranking of countries based on their electricity production and usage in the year 2014. Overall, China is the largest producer and consumer of electricity while Korea is the lowest among those countries.
    In this year, the US has produced 4,099 billion kWh which placed second to China, with 5,398 billion kWh, as the top producer. Russia and Republic of Korea had nearly equaled their amount of consumption to their production from 1,057 to 1,038 and 485.1 to 449.5 respectively. On the other hand, France, Brazil, and Germany has an almost the same amount of electricity produced averaging to nearly 600 billion kwh while Canada, France, and Brazil has nearly the same usage of approximately 500 billion kWh.
    Meanwhile, Germany is the only country in which their consumption of 582.5 billion Kwh is greater than their production of 526.6 billion Kwh. But since it produces 41.5 billion kwh greater than the last ranked country, it only placed second from the bottom outranking the Republic of Korea with only 485.1 billion kWh produced electricity.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘China is the largest producer’ China was the the largest producer because data is of past and not present. ‘which placed second’ which placed it second to China. ‘had nearly equaled their amount of consumption’ had nearly equal amount of consumption. ‘Germany has an almost’ had not has. ‘Germany is the only country’ was not is. ‘it only placed second’ it was only placed second.

  42. Shashi modi says:

    Hello, sir please check my essay and give me bands.

    Nowadays, in the school, every subjects plays a vital role for child’s study. One group of people believe that subjects like history is most emergent subject and it has its own significance for students while other school of thoughts reckon that some technical subjects are more important than history. This essay shall discuss both the arguments before reaching opinion.

    To commence with, history is useful subject for students. With the help of this subject students can able to know about their nation’s culture and tradition. And they can understand their great history. Moreover, they can know about the great kings of their country. Pupils can know about the grate innovation and their innovaters from history subject. Furthermore,they adept better lifestyle;the learn about it from history subject. ‘Mohejo-daro’ stands as an best epitome.

    Paradoxically, ohers think that technical subject like science and technology is more significant than history. Firstly, this subject has some basic and logical application so, students do not get bored as compered to the history. Secondly, this subject is helpful fir new invention, forever instance,with the aid of it, scientists research new products that make life easier. Lastly, to study this subject scholer easily learn about all things related to technology and modern world and in future the become a great scientist.

    To reiterate, I opine that, all subjects are important for children’s study but science and technology should be given greater priority than history because it is help to students to become futuristic and pro – active.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘every subjects’ it is grammatically wrong because every is singular and subjects is plural. ‘vital role for child’s study’ vital role in child’s study. ‘subjects like history is’ subject not subjects because you have written is in the later part. emergent is wrongly used here please check the meaning of this word and use where appropriate. You have give your own opinion in the introduction so that the examiner knows what to expect in the later part of the essay. ‘students can able to know’ are able to know not can. ‘grate’ it should be great. ‘innovaters’ spelling mistake innovators. Again wrong use of the word paradoxically please ensure the right usage of complex words as it can reduce your score instead of increasing it. ‘compered’ it should be compared. Your writing needs improvement specially you need to work on the small grammatical mistakes, spelling mistakes and right usage of advanced words. This attempt will get you maximum 5.5 to 6 bands.

  43. Hilori modi says:

    Hello Sir, please check my essay ane give me a band.
    Nowadays, children studied numerous subjects according to their school curriculum. some people believe that history is one of the most significant subject and other reckon that subjects like science and technology are more important rather than history. This essay shall discuss both notions before reaching the decision.
    Firstly, history is a theoretical subject about history of different countries, wars, kings of different period, and soldiers. It is necessary for every tutees to know about historical period, and some soldiers who play key role in event of Indian independence.For instance,’Mangal Pandey’,who play significant role in event preceding the outbreak of the Indian rebellion of 1857. Moreover,it’s help to enhance their general knowledge.
    On the other hand,the the World today’s are dominated by technology.It is used in almost all aspects of people’s life. Technology is used in various factor such as science, business, and medical. In a medical sector, Technology can help to treat for sick people and consequently save many lives. To examplify, the Human Genome Project has been successful and our fight against many disease has become victorious. By the using Science and Technology some space projects are become successful such as mission mangal,and Chandrayaan 2.
    To conclude that, history plays key role in to enhance child’s knowledge but in today’s Life Science and Technology has give a lots of opportunities and future prospects. It has made possible to have control over everything except over Technology.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘children studied numerous’ not studied but study. ‘one of the most significant subject’ subjects not subject. You need to make your opinion clear in the introduction so that the examiner knows what to expect in the essay. ‘some soldiers who play key role’ some should not come here, and played not play. ‘the the World today’s are dominated’ it is grammatically wrong. ‘Technology can help to treat for sick people’ for should not come here. ‘By the using Science and Technology’ by using not the using. You use the at the wrong places and in the wrong way you need to remove this mistake of yours. This essay will get maximum of 5.5 bands.

  44. Chiamaka says:

    Hello Sir, please check my essay and give me a band.
    The bar chart shows the amount of electricity generated and consumed in 10 different countries in 2014.
    Overall China produced and consumed the highest amount of electricity at 5,398 kWh and 5,322 kWh respectively followed by the United States at 4,099 kWh and 3,866 kWh respectively. While Korea Rep. produced and consumed the least amount of kWh at 485.1 and 449.5 respectively.
    Other countries such as Russia consumed almost the same amount of kWh produced at 1,038 and 1,057 respectively. Japan, India, and Canada consumed a bit less than they produced at 856.7 and 936.2, 698.8 and 871, 499.9 and 618.9 respectively.
    On the other hand, Germany consumed more electricity than they produced at 582.5 and 526.6 respectively.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your writing style is very basic. You have repetitive sentence structure, basically you have simply copy pasted one sentence in entire task and simply changed the numbers which is not going to get you good score in writing. This task will get only 1 band out of 3. Please watch our tutorial on task 1 and improve your attempt. The link to the tutorial is given below:

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIBUOHdFKII

  45. PASULA JITENDRA . says:

    The bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014 of top ten nations (units in billion kWh)
    Overall,china stands first in the production and consumption of current and korea with the least amounts .In all the countries the production is more than the consumption except in Germany it follows the opposite trend.
    The amount of electricity produced and consumed in china was 5398 and 5322 and china was followed by united states with 4099 and 3866.Russia stands in 3rd position with almost 1057 and 1038.and after japan,india,Canada are followed in the order
    France was in the 7th position with almost 561 billion kWh and 462 billion kWh of production and consumption respectively followed by brazil,gremany stands as 9th country here,the consumption is more than the production i.e around 582 and 526.korea Is in the bottom with production of 485 billion kWh and consumption around 449 billion kWh.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘consumption of current’ do not use current for electricity. ‘china was 5398 and 5322’ you have to write units here billion kwh. Always write the with United States and start countries name with capital letters. ‘Russia stands’ stands is present tense while data is of past hence wrong. avoid using short forms like i.e.

  46. PASULA JITENDRA . says:

    In the present world some people are thinking in such a way that the subjects related to science and technology are more important than history and some people say history is one of the most intresting subject in school.
    In my opinion leanring only the subjects related to science and technology will not make us a complete person.we are focusing on the technological development and leaving the historical knowledge that has many unrevealed facts.Every single person need to learn the history from the school days as this can give us a complete knowledge on the work that we are doing
    Historical knowledge is important because on each and every problem that we are trying to solve
    Has been tried by someone in the past time and that knowledge and facts can be helpful for us in solving the problems.considering an example of Bermuda traingle which was situated In atlantic ocean,Many scientists tried to solve the mystery behind that but atlast from the past knowledge it was found that due to some huge asteroid that has fallen many years ago is the cause of this.
    The technological knowledge is important for the more innovations and for solving the real world problems.without the knowledge related to science and technology nothing has been achieved.many innovations is made by technology. all the facilities that we are using are based upon the science.learning the subjects related to past will not make us grow faster in the present world.we need both technical and historical knowledge for achieving success.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You need to write a better introduction please watch our tutorial on how to attempt task 2 and learn to frame perfect introduction, the link to the tutorial is given below. ‘Every single person need’ needs not need. ‘history from the school days as this can give us a complete knowledge on the work that we are doing’ this sentence is not making any sense. Your structure and conclusion is also not well written. You need to watch our lesson carefully and learn how to attempt task 2 for better score in writing.

      https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A0_23FBCnMY

  47. Idoya Henu says:

    History assists in understanding the past and the way our culture and traditions have developed. Science and technology, on the other hand, helps in the development of the nation. In my perception, science and technology is having more significance for a nation than history and hence it should be given more importance in the curriculum for students.

    Studying the past can help the younger generation to understand the development of our nation and its varied culture and traditions. India, for example, has evolved from the days of the Mughal empire and the British acquisition, to what it is today. There is a cultural impact that Mughals have left behind and industrial enhancement that was introduced by the British to our country. The partition of our nation and its associated events can further help the youngsters realize the relationship with the neighboring provinces.

    Scientific studies, on the contrary, can promote the development of the citizens. Various experiments conducted have been able to eradicate threatening illnesses. For instance, the invention of polio drop at a minimal cost is now able to alleviate the Polio disease from our country. Furthermore, giving more emphasis on technology in the syllabus can allow the learners to explore various aspects of it to alleviate real-life concerns. To illustrate, websites like nofoodwaste.in is efficient in collecting spare food from the multinational company, which can be distributed in poor and eradicates hunger in a few houses.

    To reiterate it can be said that, although studying history serves to be crucial in understanding how our past has an impact over the present, science and technology can support to ameliorate the current condition to a better one. Hence, in my opinion, the latter has more weight over the former.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘science and technology is having more significance’ technology has more significance. Much better attempt as compared to your earlier attempts. Well structured and written with good arguments. Conclusion is also near perfect with no extra information and a crisp summary of what is written in the above section. Keep it up.

  48. Manaswi Patil says:

    Education plays an important role in overall development of children. There are number of people who believe that history is priority subject to be included in school curriculum, while others argue and opine that subjects like science and technology should be given more importance over others. In this essay, I will discuss both the views.

    it is often observed that most students memorize dates, names, events and facts that they study in history, while this information is not useful in everyday life or in the future. it is important to consider the fact that science and technology are gradually developing fields in the modern society. As a result, these sectors are always in demand and number of job opportunities are significantly on the rise. Hence, most people think that children should focus on those subjects in school, in order to be prepared and to secure better future.

    However, I also opine that history helps young people to understand their own culture and how their culture and country has evolved. it gives sense of roots and belonging. it teaches pupils what their forefathers experienced and went through in order to develop their country. history records the successes and failures from the past, from which students can learn to avoid the same mistakes in the future. Lessons from the past often gives us glimpse of the future. Valuable information from the past can be found in history, such as use of traditional medicines.

    After analyzing both the sides, in my view, though the importance of science and technology is inevitable, history is of equal importance and should be included in school syllabus.

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