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IELTS Writing Test 22

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Task 1: The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: Local people do not go very often to museums or historical sites. Why is that? What can be done to change the situation?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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21 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 22”

  1. Rinal kansara says:

    The line graph reveals the information regarding the number of tourists who had visited at three different museums of the London in four months of the year 2013. With regards to,tourists visited to British Museum,it initiated 600 thousands in June and then dramatically inclined and reached it’s zenith point,peaked at about 800 thousands in July before declining swiftly to 500 thousands in next month.However,in the following month,it swelled quickly roughly 650 thousands. Initially in June, nearly 550 thousands visitors started to visit at Natural History Museum.Number of tourists plunged gradually approximately 350 thousands and stood plateau till 2 months. Furthermore,it up surged slightly almost 480 thousands in last month.Whilst 400 thousands visitors embarked to visit Science Museum, tourists plummeted slowly 300 thousands in previous 2months.Moreover,visitors shot up rapidly round about 450 thousands in September. Overall,more tourists had been going to British Museum and less had been visiting at Science Museum over the period of four months in 2013.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      This is a much better attempt with very few mistakes. You indeed have improved a lot and we are glad that you are implementing our feedback sincerely. Keep up the good work.

  2. Rinal kansara says:

    Local people often avoid to visit museums or monuments; however,it plays integral role to develop a cognitive skill.It vouchsafes a great opportunity to individuals to know about ancient people and their lifestyle which was full of struggle.Therefore,let us discuss both the views,why people do not curious to visit in their own region and how to mitigate this issue and encourage them. Discussing the reasons the most common one is,people have become a workaholic and do not get time from their monotonous schedule,after working entire day they exhaust.Since entry fees cost them arm and leg,some people can not afford it.Moreover,people opt to invest money and indulge in another activity rather than watch same kind of things plenty of times,they get bored because they have spent their leisure time in the same territory since childhood.Another point worth noting is,in spite of Taj Mahal of Agra is a seventh wonder of the globe,due to domestic chores and more employments people are not curious about it. In order to minimize negative influence,firstly,teachers are like a building blocks ,consequently school should embark education regarding history and museums as well as begin extra activities such as competition and organize every year picnic to these places.Secondly,parents should aware them from culture and importance of it. Furthermore,governmet should reduce the cost for entry tickets,arrange the seminars in various areas,propagate through mass media.Another worth point noting is,in Bharuch,at the liberty of statue everyday tremendous individuals visit it because it has no entry ticket,it is a heavenly place for native people. Although,muesuems and historical places are treasure of country,for some people these are worthlessness.To alleviate it,school should give assignment and project work on it.(give me bands also for this task)

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your introduction is not proper because you did these are not views or opinion essay it is a problem solution essay. Please watch the video carefully and see how to write introduction for both opinion and idea essay. Instead of monotonous write hectic schedule. Divide the essay in the structure discussed in the video do not write in one single paragraph. ‘These are worthlessness’ it should be worthless. Write in proper structure then we can give you exact band score.

  3. Rinal kansara says:

    Here I had written again it initiated bcz still I m confuse where to use it so I wrote it knowingly.would u plz tell me is it correct or not in task 1???????and thanks only for u I m improveing my self.thanks a lot.when I will get good score bcz of u I will tell score

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Do not use initiated or knowingly in task 1. We hope the latest video on Task 1 will make it more clear.

  4. Rinal kansara says:

    I will write task 2 also but would u plz tell me if there is any other mistake? grammar ?so next time when I will write it I will make correction in this.and sorry I had written it in my phone so all got mix.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Your major mistake is wrong use of prepositions like in, to, for, please work on this. Rest is improving with each attempt.

  5. Haruun says:

    The line graph highlights the number of tourists in hundreds that visited three different museums in London from June to September, 2013. Overall, it can be noticed from the graph that there were fluctuations in the number of visitors in all the museums, but their respective positions remained constant over the period.

    At the beginning of the period, 600 people visited the British Museum, being the highest in June, followed by the number of visitors to the National History Museum, which was approximately 550, and the least number went to the Science Museum, being exactly 400. In July, the number of tourists to British Museum increased sharply to around 700, while the proportion of visitors to both National History and Science Museums declined to below 400, however the standings remain unchanged.

    In August, people visiting the British Museum decreased drastically to 500,the number of individuals who visited the National History Museum remained the same as July, and tourists to the Science Museum further dropped to 300. At the end of the period in September, there were increased in the number of visitors to all the museums, British Museum had about 650,the National History Museum and Science Museum both had around 400,but the latter was the least.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      First mistake the tourists number is not in hundreds it is in thousands. You have reported the numbers all wrong, it is not 600 it is 600,000 number of visitors. Proportion is not used for absolute numbers like 400 it is used for ratios and percentages. Your English is correct in this essay but you have made a huge blunder in reporting numbers.

  6. Haruun says:

    Yes, I just realized it

  7. vish says:

    The line graph gives data about the number of visitors visit three museums in London over a period of four months i.e. from the month of June to September in the year 2003.

    Overall, In London, the people gave the highest priority to the British Museum, Moderately for Natural History Museum and least Priority for Science Museum in one the particular year of 2003.

    Firstly, the British Museum, during the month of June the visitors visits increased from 600 thousand to almost 750 thousand. Then during the period of a month i.e. July to August, there is a slight fall of five hundred thousand. In September visits reached 650,000 which is higher than visits in June. In contrast, the Natural History Museum initially the count of visitors is 550,000 in June and their linear decrease at the end of June fall to 380,000. There is gradual growth in three months reached approximately to 480,000 visits.

    Although, the Science Museum at first it is recorded as low in the number of visits that is four hundred thousand and further reduced to three hundred thousand from the months of June to August. Later on, it reached the number of 470,000 visits in September.

    Please provide band score and suggestions.
    Thank you well in advance

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Number of visitors for three museums, not visitors visit museum. Do not use short forms i.e. Moderately and Priority should be with small m and p. One the particular year is wrong sentence formation. Visitors visits did not increase, but the number of visitors increased. There is a slight fall, here you have used is which is of present tense but data is from past. You have made a lot grammatical mistakes in this task for example using present tense ‘is’, ‘decrease’. Also you have use the word visits with numbers but it is not visits it number of visitors. You will get 1-1.5 band out of 3 for this task with more chances of 1.

  8. Rinal Kansara says:

    The line graph reveals that the number of tourists who visited several museums of London during 4 months in the the year of 2013.

    Overall,the figure of number of visitors at british museum dominated , whereas least number of people visited science museum within a time span of four months in 2013.

    According to the line graph,the figure of number of people at british museum stood at 600 thousands in the month of June and then it inclined dramatically and reached its zenith approximately 750 thousands tourists in July before it declining drastically to 500 thousands tourists in August. Again, it swelled nearly 650 thousands visitors in September.

    As per the graph,maximum people about 550 thousands went to see natural history museum in June but number of people reduced almost 380 thousands and remained stable until August.Furthermore, visitors of natural history museum soared around 390 thousands in September.
    Moreover,400 thousands tourists had watched Science museum in June after that the pattern gradually dived close to 290 thousands in August.In addition,in the month of September,the pattern of tourists of science museum quickly leaped around 440 thousands.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Write the name of museums with capital letters like British Museum. ‘figure of number of’ figure and number mean same thing so write one not both. ‘before it declining’ it should not come here. ‘nearly 650 thousand’ nearly to 650 thousand. ‘reduced almost 380 thousands’ reduced almost to 380,000. You have repeated this mistake in entire task, write to with numbers. ‘had watched Science museum’ not watched, went to, you watch things like movies etc..Otherwise a good attempt.

  9. RINAL KANSARA says:

    sir always in all graph i have to write nearly to and almost to?let me know sir where i have to use it.i always get confused.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      nearly, almost, approximately all mean the same and can be used when number in the graph is close to the exact number

  10. Marie says:

    The line graph gives a report about the number of tourists who visited the British, Science and Natural history museums in London between June and September in 2013.

    Overall, all the months but August had the highest number of tourists to the British museum. People rarely visited the science museum throughout the summer period.

    Tourists to the British museum were 600 thousand in June 2013. This number drastically peaked to about 750 thousand in July before dropping by around 250 thousand in August. Visitors to this site increased by roughly 150 thousand in the final year, September.

    The Natural history museum received about 550 thousand tourists in June. In July, this number reduced by nearly 200 thousand and remained constantly stable until August before steadily rising to just below 500 thousand in the last month. Exactly 400 thousand people went to the Science museum in the month of June. Visitors here, reduced each month until the figure came to 300 thousand in August then significantly rose by approximately 150 thousand in the final year.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘People rarely visited the science museum throughout the summer period’ you cannot say this because first summer is not of one month and secondly never give your opinion in task 1 simply state what is shown in the image. ‘remained constantly stable’ either use constant or stable you cannot use both. You have a good command over english and can score good bands in writing. Keep your writing style precise and avoid giving interpretations to task 1.

  11. Ravi Prakash Upadhyai says:

    The given line graph compares number of people to visit three London museums (British Museum (BM), Natural History Museum (NHM) and Science Museum(SM)) from the month of June to September in the year 2013.
    Overall, British Museum observed maximum number of visitors during the period. Whereas, number of people to visit Science Museum were least. In addition, Number of visitors for all three is fluctuating.
    British Museum witnessed steady rise in number from 600 thousands to around 750 thousands whereas Natural History Museum and Science Museum had decline in number of visitor between June to July. From month of July to August, visitors decreased from nearly 750 thousands to 500 thousands for British Museum. However, visitors remained steady for Natural History Museum to nearly 375 thousand and for Science Museum decline remained continued from previous month.
    All three Museum; BM, NHM and SM showed rise in visitor during august to September 500 to 650, nearly 375 to 475 and 300 to approximately 450, respectively. All numbers are in thousands.

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