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IELTS Writing Test 11

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Task 1: The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: The restoration of old buildings in major cities throughout the world involves enormous expenditure. This money would bring more benefits if it was used to provide new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write at least 250 words.

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29 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 11”

  1. Samisha Budhathoki says:

    The bar graph illustrates the three different age gap of people in the percentage who find it difficult to make friends, search for the good place to live in and learning local languages when they move to other countries for the better opportunity. Overall, the highest number of young generation from age 18 to 34 have to face challenges in making new friends, in contrast, elders over 55 find it challenging to learn native languages when they migrate to settle in different countries.

    According to the chart, the highest percentage of 46% of the younger generation find it challenging in making new friends in other countries. Additionally, 40% of them face problems in finding places to live but conversely, only a few numbers of 29% of the youngsters face difficult to learn native languages. Likewise, the middle age group from 35 to 54, more of them around 39% find difficulties in getting home to live. A nearly equal number of middle age group people around 36% and 35% face problems in making friends and learning the local language.

    Conversely, the elders over 55 find it easy to make new friends and new places to live but difficult in learning the local language in another country. There are only 23% and 22% of the numbers of elders who face challenges in making new friends and good places to stay, whereas, there are 54% of elders who have big problems in learning native languages of different countries.

    • IELTS-PTE says:

      Your starting line does is a bit ambiguous and does not clearly state the purpose of the graph. Please avoid repetition of points as you have done with making friends challenge. With 36% and 35% face problems line end it with respectively. Grammatical error in third para ‘difficult in learning’.

  2. Haruna Adamu says:

    The given chart illustrates three specific problems individuals in three different age groups from 18 to over 55 years encounter in abroad and the unit is in percentage.
    Overall, it can be seen from the chart that when it comes to making friends and finding a place to live, the under 55 years people had more challenges than the over 55 years, however it was the opposite in terms of learning the local language which the over 55 encountered more problems than the under 55.

    For the purposes of socialization, the age group 18 to 34 faced more troubles, scoring 46% being the highest, followed by age between 35 and 54 which also had 36%,and the over 55 were the lowest having 23%. In terms of habitation, both age groups 18 to 34 and 35 to 54 still reported more problems with 40% for the former and 39% for the latter, and the over 55 were still the least having 22%.

    The table turned when it comes to learning the local dialect, the over 55years had more challenges scoring 54% being the high mark, next was age group 35 to 54 which is always in the middle in all the problems having 35% and the least was 18 to 34 which scored 29%.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Never use in or to with abroad, a very common mistakes which many students make. Encounter abroad not in abroad. The sentence structure – age between 35 and 54 also had 36% – is wrong, they did not have anything, this is % of people who faced some problem. Similarly scoring is a wrong word here.

  3. annie says:

    Owing to the growing population there are fewer houses to live compared to the population around the globe. The renovation of old building costs a fortune, some people think this money could provide new homes and a better road. In my opinion, I completely agree that this the best way to accommodate the growing population and put this large amount of money to better use.

    Firstly, the older buildings are more prone to collapse. Constant renovation is required to maintain such buildings. This process consumes a massive amount of money and large manpower to do so, though the risk underlying still persists. Those buildings were built to accommodate big families which we hardly see these days. Now, we just have a huge building with very few family members living in such houses who can be easily accommodated in a much smaller space. Similarly, older roads take an ample amount of travel time and even make it accident prone.

    Older buildings were designed keeping in mind the situation prevailing at the time building was built. Things have changed drastically and are still changing. In this era of modernization, buildings need to be fully equipped to deal with current environmental conditions. Instead of investing in older buildings to match with the current scenario it is better to build a new house with all basic amenities at a much lower cost. With better planning, these new buildings will accommodate more families in the same area of land. New and better roads provide easy and hassle-free transportation and movement within states.

    In conclusion, to keep up with the changing lifestyle building new houses and better roads is the easiest and most effective method.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      You cannot write in my opinion i completely agree, instead write i completely concur with this argument. Agree that this ‘is’ the best way, is missing. This is a much better attempt as compared to your task 21 attempt because here you have framed points around the core issue. Try to write a bit more elaborate conclusion.

  4. Rinal kansara says:

    The chart reveals the ratio of difficulties face by three age groups in making friends,finding accommodation and learning dialect when people migrate to another countries.

    Overall, usually the people of age between 35 to 54 face almost similar difficulties in making friendship, searching accommodation and learning dialect among all age groups.

    According to the chart,in the age groups of 18 to 34, 46% people cope with difficulty in finding peers,while ratio of people decline by 6% in finding home and 17% in learning local language. Furthermore,in the age group of 35 to 54,36% people have difficulty in making new friends and ratio incline, 39% in searching houses and then percentage again reduce ,35% people struggle in learning new language.

    As per the graph, percentage of people of more than 55 yeras go through fluctuations. Maximum 54% people find arduous to learn dialect,whereas least percentage people 22%, find that searching living place is difficult for them and percentage is almost similar in doing friendship.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Making friends not friendship. ‘39% in searching houses and then percentage again reduce ,35% people struggle in learning new language.’ instead of using comparison words like incline and reduce, it is better to state these percentages independently. For example, 36% of people in the age group 35 to 54 find it difficult to make new friends after relocating to a foreign country, whereas, 39% reported suitable accommodation search as a challenge. In the same age group, conversing in the local dialect appeared as a difficult task for 35% of migrants.

  5. Rinal kansara says:

    There is no doubt that maintenance of historical buildings is absolutely expensive.Since ancient skyscrapers are construct before many years,they immediately get damaged.While some people advocate that conservation of monuments is essential,some believe that it is fruitful to spend money in making better infrastructure.But I support the former notion and in the following section both views will be discussed.

    To commence with, ancient skyscrapers should be prevented because historical buildings are a backbone of economy.Furthermore,it attracts tourists from all over the globe and every year tremendous number of visitors visit ancient buildings which certainly helps to escalate economy of the country.Also, tourists spend hard money for accommodation, travelling, shopping,food therefore,plenty of people get job opportunity and better life.Sencondly, historical buildings are an identity of the country and provide the information regarding history of the country. Moreover,these places impart the knowledge about ancient civilization,customs, culture and historical periods.Hence, monuments always keep history alive in the heart of people.To illustrate,in India,every year immense number of visitors visit The Taj Mahal of Agra which is the seventh wonder of this world.

    On the contrary,government should provide huge monetary value in developing habitats and highway rather than investing in monuments because it is the liability of government towards citizens to acquire them all rudimentary facilities. weAdditionally,it will improve the living standards of individuals as well as it will pave the way for remove penury of the country.

    To recapitulate,although evolvement in shelter and roads can definitely give fundamental facilities to individuals, monuments pay attention of tourists to visit these places and enhance economy of the country.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘Since ancient skyscrapers are construct before many years,they immediately get damaged’ this sentence is grammatically wrong and we are not sure what you are trying to say here. ‘should be prevented because’ prevented is wrong word here because prevent means to stop something from happening right word is preserved. Again you made the same mistake. In introduction you have said that you support one notion and then both views will be discussed. Does the question statement say that discuss both views? You are not reading our feedback carefully and implementing it. How would you improve if you keep on repeating same mistakes which we have pointed so many times earlier?

  6. Rinal kansara says:

    Sorry before reading previous response I had sent my answer.i will not repeat it again.and is it like that? ancient skyscrapers had constructed before many years, it often needs maintenance

  7. Preetham says:

    The chart illustrates about the challenges faced by the people when they go to live in other countries.
    Overall,the chart shows three different age groups and number of challenges reported by each person.People who fall under the age group over 55 majorly faced learning local language as a problem.
    The category finding somewhere to live constitutes 39% of reported challenges per person for the people in the age group 35-54.However for the same age group there is just 3 percentage points decrease when it comes to making friends and 4 percentage points decrease for learning local language.For the age group above 55 percentage of challenges reported per person for the categories making friends and finding somewhere to live is almost same with only 1 percentage point difference between them.
    People who were between 18-34 found making friends difficult as it contributed 46% of reported challenges whereas only 29% of reported challenges per person for learning local language and 40% constituted finding some where to live.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is not number of challenges, rather three different types of challenges. You could have used different words to represent different challenges, for example instead repeating making friends you could write making new acquaintances and for learning local language you could use the native dialect of the country people have migrated to. Overall it is an improvement over your previous attempts. Keep it up.

  8. jazzzz says:

    It has been seen that the government spends huge amount of money to preserve the old building in many cities. Owing to the increasing population, some people opine that the construction of the new buildings and roads are important and hence more money should be spent on such things. I, however, beg to differ. I believe that the preservation of old buildings is equally important. Numbers of arguments support my viewpoint.

    It is indeed a true that with the increasing population it is becoming difficult to house a large number of people, which leads to the construction of slum areas. The government should spend money on the development of new modern buildings, which can accommodate more number of people. Money spent on the roads would mean less traffic and less number of accidents on the roads. The government investment in new buildings would lead to reduced housing price, and hence poor people will also be able to buy one house, and as a result standard of living would increase.
    On the other side, advantages of keeping the old buildings intake cannot be denied. Nowadays, tourism has become a backbone of many economies. Old building such as Taj Mahal acts as a magnet to attract tourist, which boost the economy of the country. Old and historical buildings also reflect our culture. Losing old building would mean losing our culture and history. Old buildings also bring name and fame to the country. For instance, people visit Taj Mahal from all over the globe. If we lose such building then we will lose our opportunity to spread our culture.
    To sum up, I believe that the government should invest equally in the redecoration of old buildings and in the construction of roads or new housing. Better approach would be to use the revenue generated from tourism in the maintenance of old buildings.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘construction of the new buildings and roads are important’ is important. ‘beg to differ’ do not use this phrase instead write however, i hold a contrarian view. ‘It is indeed a true’ a should not come here. In the introduction you say old buildings should be preserved and then in the next paragraph you give arguments in favour of building new houses and roads hence contradicting yourself which is a huge mistake. You would not get more than 6 bands for combined task 1 and task 2.

  9. jazzzz says:

    The chart compares the average challenges face by the people when they move to different countries, according to different age categories. Three different challenges given are namely making friends, finding somewhere to live, leaning local language.
    Overall, maximum people over 55 find it really difficult to learn local language, whereas people under 54 struggles most to make friends and find a place to live.
    Almost half of people aged between 18-34, face challenges in making friends, while this number increases to 36% for people who are in 35-54 age category, however, few people, over 55, find it difficult to make friends.
    Almost 40% of people who are below 54 face difficulties to find place to stay, in contrast only 22% of the people face this challenge who are above 55. In 18-34 age category, three out of every ten people face difficulties while learning the local language, this number gets double for people over 55, while nearly a third population from 35-54 age group face this challenge.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘average challenges face by’ it is not average challenge you cannot write average with challenge because average is used with things which can be quantified so it is challenges faced, not face. ‘people under 54 struggles’ struggle because people is plural and always use the with words like most and least. ‘face difficulties to find place to stay’ difficulties in finding, and avoid using repetition of words, like difficulty has been used repeatedly, you should use other words or phrases like people are hard pressed when it comes to make new acquaintances.

  10. pinksushi says:

    In most countries of the world, old places and buildings are renovated spending plethora of money. A specific part of the country’s budget is fixed for the restoration purposes. Some say that it would be more beneficial for the society if that money could be spend on the contemporary travelling roads and housing schemes. I tend to disagree with this argument and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.
    Firstly, the historical buildings and monuments are the country’s pride and heritage.These are the building blocks of current nation’s development structure. Therefore, it is really important to keep them alive for the spiritual connection of the society with the history and past. In this way, people will always remember who they were and how far humanity has come along with time.
    Another reason why I disagree with the topic statement is that it is crucial to renovate these aged masterpieces for encouraging tourism sector. For instance, a study by American Tourism Association revealed that tourism covers 20% of Egypt’s economy and it is mostly due to the famous Pyramids. If the mosques, palaces and temples are not taken care of then less number of tourists and travellers will visit the country. In other words, this will drop the revenue of the country with a major figure.
    In conclusion, although it is commonly thought that spending money on maintenance of historical buildings rather than for more useful purposes like building roads and houses is the waste of country’s precious finance. I believe that a nation, as discussed, have to keep this part of their culture and heritage away from destruction as it is a reminder of past for them and could also act as a major source of national income.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘could be spend’ spent not spend. Your arguments in the first body paragraph are confusing because first you talk about development and then about spiritual connection which does not match. ‘I disagree with the topic statement’ you cannot write topic statement, instead write i disagree with this notion or opinion or argument.

  11. Bonnie says:

    The chart below illustrates data about the problems which people encounter in different age groups when they move to live abroad.

    Overall, in the range of 18-34 years old and over 55 years old present distinct difference in 3 types of problems, on the other hand, middle age group which is between 35-54 years old represents similar ratio in the same same problems.

    When comparing 3 different groups, making new friends is the highest percentage in the age group 18 to 34 which comprise 46% of total, while group of over 55 years old has this problem with only 23 %.
    similarly, 40% of people have problem that is finding dwelling in the 18-34 age group, and over 55 years old people have the same problem with only 22%, which is lowest percentage in three groups.

    By contrast, more than half percentage of people who are over 55 years old struggle with learning native dialect of the country, whilst only 29% of people who are in 18-34 age group have the same problem.

    Between 35-54 years old people show almost moderate ratio in the 3 different problems that are making relationship as a friend , settling, and learning regional language with 36%, 39% and 35% respectively.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘The chart below’ do not write below because on the answer sheet there is no chart below for the examiner to see. ‘making new friends is the highest percentage’ has the highest percentage not is the highest. ‘0% of people have problem that is finding dwelling’ that is should not come here. ‘more than half percentage’ percentage is redundant here since half in itself is a percentage of 50%.

  12. NITIN KHANNA says:

    The bar chart depicts the major hardships people encounter after migration to other countries across different age groups. Here are few insights into each of these challenges as reported.
    While it is observed that the younger population between the age group 18-34 struggle to make new friends with 46% finding it tough, the older generation in the above 55 age group find it relatively easier, with only 23% reporting that as a prominent challenge.
    The people in above 55 age group also faced the least trouble in finding the accommodation with only 22% reporting it, whereas people in both the age groups of 18-34 and 35-54 see that as quite a difficult task to achieve with almost 40% in both the cases.
    Understandably, youngest generation is able to adapt better to the local dialect with only 29% reporting it to be difficult, and we see an increasing trend for this challenge with respect to increasing age groups. It is the highest rated challenge with more than half of the oldest age group.

  13. Aisha says:

    The bar chart provides information about the challengers people of different age groups come across when they move to other countries. It can be observed that people from 18 to 34 are more likely to face challenges in making new friends and finding a proper place to live, while age group over 55 find learning local languages the most difficult.
    The elderly are facing the problem of learning a native language in 54% of cases, as for socialization and looking for accommodation; these types of challengers are found in 23 and 22 percent of people respectively.
    In comparison, nearly a half of young people, 46% to be exact, have problems with forming new acquaintance and about 40% with finding a place to live, however only 30% have encountered difficulties in learning foreign language.
    As for the middle aged people, the percentage in every type of challenge is approximately the same, reaching 37%.

  14. Aisha says:

    There are contrasting viewpoints on whether the government should fund old buildings’ restoration or invest money to construct new ones and improve infrastructure. In this essay, I will try to consider the validity of both viewpoints and present my own opinion on this issue.
    First of all, it is important to identify why some people find old buildings worth restoration. One reason for that could be the fact that some old buildings can hold a historical value and represent a city landmark, thereby, can attract tourists to visit the city. However, this applies only for a small percentage of structures, and most of old buildings are ordinary and should be completely reconstructed, rather than restored. Also, it is worth noting that these buildings are obsolete and living there will be dangerous. As a result, their general reconstruction and modernization will cost much more than the construction of a new building.
    Another fact in favor of people, who think that financing new buildings and roads is more thoughtful, is the land issue. The fact that the territory is limited and it cannot be constantly expanded should also be taken into account, while the construction of modern multi-storey buildings can significantly mitigate the situation. Moreover, improvements in infrastructure and road quality will be beneficial for citizens and society.
    In conclusion, I would like to reiterate the above points and express my opinion. I think that government should finance historically valuable buildings, but the majority of the funding should be spent for the construction of new buildings and road development.

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