TASK 1: The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
TASK 2: The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
TASK 1 SAMPLE ANSWER: The graph shows the changes in occupations in four different kind of jobs in the US from 1960 to 2020. In 1960, the number of Manufacturing was the highest in these four sectors, 15 millions, and the second highest was Retail and Agriculture as a same number (5 million). I can see the huge gap between highest number of occupations and second’s in 1960. Moreover; Healthcare is lowest number at approximately 2.5 million.
Firstly, the number of healthcare increace dramatically rather than the other three sectors. People who work as a healthcare had grown more than six times in 60 years, which is the highest number in 2020 with Retail sector. Furthermore, the number of Retail is also great rise. Manufacturing was most common jobs in 1960, however these declined from 15 million to 13 million in 2020.
In addition, Agriculture was third highest in 1960 and had. decreased. 6 million to 2 million, which is the lowest in 2020. To sum up, it can be seen that the economy in the US changed. significantly in 60 years
from 1960 to 2020, and at the same time occupations had been altered.
TASK 2 BAND 7 ANSWER: Firstly, tall apartment blocks economize land area since it makes use of its vertical space compared to multiple residential areas which waste a major portion of area, multiple apartments can squeeze in more homes at each floor. Besides, heavily populated cities are rife with locals and expatriates seeking a place to live in a while they go about their business there. By utilising the apartment’s geometrical structure, more homes can be provided for them at a cheaper cost.
Moreover, apartment blocks usually offer homes at a price lower than the ones set for onland homes. Bungalows, semi-detached, double story houses and others would usually be a pain in the wallet for someone without a stable or sufficient income, much like those who are new to the city. By building more apartments, more affordable housing can be accessed by many layers of the society. To paint a picture, we can visualize an example of a rookie worker at a major firm in a big city like Kuala Lumpur. He or she
might not be planning to permanently reside there and raise a family but they definitely have the option of a stable house to return to at the end of a day’s work. For families, they definitely can benefit the most as they do not have to pay a throat-choking price while still juggling the cost of raising children and dealing with bills and taxes.
In conclusion, governments should implement an urban-planning scheme which involve building more tall apartment blocks in large cities. In doing so, the percentage of homelessness may decrease largely. Not only that, the productivity of the city will improve and boost the country’s overall economy. Homes are crucial for a harmonious and safe community as well as healing one’s mental health. Although there may be other mechanisms in place to achieve this common goal, I still stand firm with my reasons.
High rise buildings are the best way to provide enough homes to people in large cities. Increase in population brings in a housing problem with it especially in large cities and I see vertical development as it’s best possible solution.
More and more people are born each year and many move to large cities in search of better learning and job opportunities. This brings in a major housing problem in large cities. Expanding large cities horizontally results in deforestation, which is another major concern of the world right now. Obviously there is only limited area of land available to build houses in large cities and if the government has to accommodate everyone horizontally, it will have to expand on its outskirts, which will definitely require deforestation and humans will be disrupting the wildlife.
On the other hand, if cities are expanded vertically and tall apartment blocks are built, then more people can be adjusted in less area of land. Leading cities of the world like Dubai and London are an example of this type of expansion. They are few of the busiest cities of the world and people live in apartment buildings and the model is quite successful over there. Same area which otherwise would have had a two story house, can have a twenty floor building, providing home to many families.
Considering all the pros and cons, I come to the conclusion that the best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks and cities which are facing accommodation crises should consider this mode of development for a better future.
1. ‘More and more people are born each year’ – instead write ‘With no decline in birth rate’
2. ‘brings in a major housing problem’ – this is repetition of phrase which will hurt your band score
3. ‘limited area of land available ‘ – with constraint on habitable land available
4. ‘Leading cities’ – Prominent cities
5. ‘They are few’ – these not they
Task 1
From the graph we could see the amount of job from four different sector of the economy in the US.
First we can see manufacturing has been the highest among the four in two decades, however in 1980 forward it dropped significantly. Second, agriculture reached its peak from the least job to the highest job in the economy on 2020,following retail that has been increasingly stable. As for healthcare, the sector had been decreasingly stable under 5 million from time to time.
To conclude, we can see that retail and agriculture are the most significant job on the economy compared to manufacturing and retail.
Task 2
The population in large cities has been increasing because mostly people tend to find work, especially metropolitan city gave the best job opportunities. While the population has grown, there will be limited space to build houses on land. In this case, i agree to build tall apartment blocks especially in over populated area. Reflecting for my own experience, the place where i live in Jakarta, people come and go either for business or work while it’s hardly to find an empty land to build a house. The government see the land scarcity problem, and decide to build a tall apartment blocks for those who in needs. Also selling or renting an apartment was more easier for them especially the one who only came temporarily for work. From the new generation perspective, they prefer to rent an apartment then a land house, so it would be benefit for both landlord, buyer, and the real estate owner.
However, in other hand tall apartment buildings can cause disadvantages too. For example, it could case the land drown deeper to the sea, as Jakarta has been dropped 30 cm per year. From the disaster side, if there will be an earthquakes then it will be more harm for those people who live or scattered around in. In conclusion, there is pros and cons with building blocks of tall apartment, but for now especially in the office district, having an apartment around is more likely advantage rather than places in the suburb area in the city like Bogor, Depok, Tangerang, and Bekasi.
1. ‘especially metropolitan city’ – especially in metropolitan cities which have given
2. You need to work on your introduction. See our youtube tutorial to improve your introduction.
3. ‘The government see the land scarcity problem’ – it is grammatically wrong. The government has acknowledged
4. ‘the new generation perspective’ – new generation’s perspective
5. You need to work a lot on your grammar and vocabulary if you want to score good bands in writing.
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This line graph displays information on the jobs in the US for four sectors of the economy from 1960 to 2020.
Overall, the retail and healthcare sectors both grew progressively, reaching 16 million jobs each by 2020. In contrast, the manufacturing sector experienced a decline from its initial starting point on the graph. Meanwhile, the agricultural sector did not ascend on the chart at all, having a steady decline all through the chart.
Retail and healthcare started off respectively at 6 and 3 million jobs in 1960. They both had an surge in popularity with healthcare having a linear progression all through to 2020. On the other hand, healthcare also had a linear progression however, between 2000 and 2020 the sector had a slower progression in comparison with previous years. Both sectors each reached a peak of 16 million jobs by 2020.
In contrast, the manufacturing job sector started off at 15 million jobs in 1960, it experienced a surge which peaked at 20 million jobs in 1980. After this surge, it regressed continuously falling to 13 million jobs by 2020.
Meanwhile, the agricultural sector started of at 6 million jobs in 1980, its highest on the chart which dropped to 4 million jobs by 1980. the decline was a bit stable between 1980 and 2020 reaching 2 million jobs by 2020.
1. ‘ascend on the chart at all, having a steady decline all through the chart’ – the trend does not happen on the chart so you cannot write that through the chart instead write that throughout the years
2. ‘They both had an surge’ – they is used for persons so write these sectors
3. ‘progression’ – avoid repetition and overuse of words and phrases in your writing
4. ‘surge’ – repetition
5. ‘ts highest’ – instead of highest use the word zenith
TASK 2
The statement that “tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes in large cities” is one I strongly agree with. The subsequent paragraphs would provide an insight.
The general human population has been increasing substantially for decades. The majority of these population are working class adults who are majorly spread across the major cities. With this recent surge in population and urbanization, most of the employment opportunities are concentrated in the city centres. This ultimately drives the demand for housing within the city centre.
This demand is almost always catered for by the government through low-cost housing or private developers. The exorbitant cost of real estate properties in city centres most times translates to the need of developing high rise buildings. This is the only way the limited available land can be maximized to the fullest. The high rise blocks, provide an avenue to house thousands of people on a small piece of land rather than spread thousands people across various structures.
Another aspect that makes high rise a good option is the sense of communal living it breeds. It’s already been established that young working class adults are prime for these buildings. These adults are also prime for settling down and building families. The sense of community associated with high rise buildings can help foster deep social root for the kids of the same peer.
There is an argument that living on the outskirts of town is cheaper compared to living in the city centre. That’s true, but the stress of the daily commute associated with the metropolitan cities is a little price to pay for the satisfaction of living close to work. The peace and serenity that comes from living close to the workplace is a pleasure that a price cannot be placed on. The cost of transportation to the outskirts of the city is basically substituted for the higher cost of rent in high rise blocks.
In conclusion, despite some concerns about the cost of high rise buildings it is the best way to provide homes in large cities
1. Your introduction is absolutely wrong. Watch our tutorial on how write perfect introduction.
2. majority, major, majorly – you need to work on this overuse of words and phrases.
3. ‘real estate properties’ – you cannot use properties with real estate.
4. ‘It’s’ – it has never use short forms in IELTS writing.
5. ‘That’s true’ – that is true
6. You need to work on your vocabulary as it is very basic