IELTS MASTER | sample essay 16

sample essay 16

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the fast-paced world that we presently reside in, selecting the subjects for study is important. However, there is a debate that which subject needs to be selected that benefits the students most. I believe that one needs to select different courses along with their regular subjects that are not part of the curriculum as it has many benefits when compared to just reading from a set of limited books.

Those who argue that students need to learn extra subjects apart from their syllabus have a point. Firstly, reading a variety of books helps learners build a stronger vocabulary, which will in turn help the students in later stages of their careers or life. Additionally, the books that they are reading can inspire them to lead a different way of life. For instance, an autobiography from a famous person has helped many young and old people to get motivated and also develop some new skills. A person who reads from multiple books will not have spare time.

Even though, reading from a variety of books has its benefits, paying attention and studying books which are compulsory subjects has its perks. When a student is made to learn only for their qualification it provides good grades and gives a sense of self accomplishment. For example, a person who studies 1 book can focus and grasp more when compared to someone who reads 4 to 5 books. One can complete reading their books and enjoy their free time doing other activities and pass the time.

In conclusion, reading multiple books enhances a reader’s vocabulary, motivates them, and gives them good grades. This is why in my opinion, students at University should be encouraged to learn various subjects along with their important subjects.


1. ‘subject needs’ – subjects need
2. ‘most’ – the most
3. ‘select’ – avoid repetition of words and phrases, instead you could you could write ‘choose’ or ‘opt’
4. ‘it has’ – these have, since you have written courses which is plural
5. The last line of second paragraph is not making any sense as it has ended abruptly, you need to elaborate on this
6. ‘their’ – his or her, since you have written a student which is singular
7. ‘1’ – one book
8. ‘their’ – his or her, since you have written ‘one can’ which is singular
9. ‘them’ – him or her
10. ‘University´- university not University
11. The vocabulary used in the essay is very basic and repetitive, it needs a lot of improvement
12. The essay is full of grammatical errors that needs to be addressed

Band score – 5