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IELTS Writing Test 87

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Task 1: The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children’s activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Write at least 250 words.

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13 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 87”

  1. RINAL KANSARA says:

    The two pie charts reveal the result of a survey of cultural and leisure activities of two genders in which they participated.
    Overall,both genders had constant proportion in listening music.While more boys indulged in playing computer games,dancing was the hobby of more girls. With regards to cultural and leisure activities of boys and girls,soccer activity accounted for 17% of boy’s activities, and experienced a 5% decrease to more than one tenth in girl’s gymnastics activity.Furthermore,a tiny fraction boys has reading activity whereas it raised over two tenth for girls.In contrast,listening music activity by both genders,boys and girls, remained static at exactly 10%.
    According to the pie chart,activity regarding computer games decreased from 34% boys to 16% girls.Boys of skateboarding activity were 11%, and experienced a growth of 4% girls in netball activity.Proportion of boys that comprised of a little more than quarter remained relatively constant in dancing activity of girls. (sir let me know here i can use all this words accounted and comprised for boys and girls.or it can reduce my band score.let me know sir.i change sentences if it is.)

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Not constant proportion but same proportion. Do not write decrease because you cannot compare here since the data is not for same gender in two pie charts. Yes you can use accounted for and comprised here for one gender.

  2. RINAL KANSARA says:

    It is irrefutable that crime rate is proliferating at a startling pace among youth in all over the globe.Since youngsters are unable to take accurate decision,they often do crime which has detrimental influence on their future.Furthermore,teenagers are backbone of society.However there are several causes which engender this problem,it can be mitigated with some innovative solutions.Therefore,in the following section both causes and remedies are discussed.
    Discussing the reasons,the most common one is,people have become career oriented and it is holistically arduous for parents to pay more attention on youth and scarcity of money paves the way for crime to teenagers because some often desire to make exclusive image in community.Secondly,individuals have started to live in nuclear family rather than extend family where there is no grandparents who can teach them etiquette, moral value,alleviate their issues.Also,teen age is a crucial phase of life which comes once in a life,they hangout with peers in disco,bar where after seeing behavior of peers such as consumption of alcohol,drugs they attract to imitate their life style which had adverse effect on them.Another point worth worth is noting that,according to the reality show Crime Petrol,every year 60% youngsters have been doing crime, especially who have been studying in hostel,faraway from home.
    The mentioned causes have myriad precaution.Whilst it is absolutely liability of parents to prevent their children,government can alleviate this issue legally.Moreover,parents should spent their quality time with youngsters and from childhood they should vouchsafe proper knowledge because children are like sponges,they absorb immediately at young age whatever their parents teach them.Additionally,government should embark to restriction on sales of drugs, alcohol and they should emphasis to give castigation to offenders.
    To recapitulate,teenagers are future of parents who have plenty of accountability during entire life,parents should rare them in superior environment.Although myriad factors affect on youth to break the law,it can be ameliorate with family members and governments.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Much better introduction in this essay Good. Joint or extended family not extend family. Attract to imitate is wrong simply write they imitate. Worth worth? Worth noting not is noting. Should rare them? Rare means something less. Affect the youth not on youth.

  3. RINAL KANSARA says:

    let me know sir pls here i have compared boys and girls so u r telling that u can not write decrease or increase it correct?it can be possible only in two different years? and suppose if i had compared boy’s activity then can i use it?and can i score overall bands 6.5?in both attempt?

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Yes since these are percentages for two different categories you cannot compare these. You could compare if there was a decrease or increase for same category.

  4. RINAL KANSARA says:

    can i write here parents should bring up them in superior atmosphere?

  5. Haruun says:

    There is an upsurge of criminal activities specifically with the young ones in many parts of the world. This essay will discuss some of the causes such as poor parental guidance, high unemployment rate and propose some remedies to curb this menace in detail.

    First of all, one of the principal reasons why crime rate among the youth are on the rise is poor parental care. To elaborate further, in recent times due to the nature of our work schedules, most working parents or guidance do not get enough time to be with their children, hence the parents will not know whether their children are in a good or bad company in terms of the kind of friends they have since teenagers learned or copied most of their attitudes and behaviours from their close peers. Furthermore, high unemployment rate particularly among the youth across the globe is one major caused of criminality. For instance, a related study which was conducted by an NGO based in Ghana called Social Care group in the year 2016, concerning the relationship between unemployment and crime rate in five regions of Ghana. The outcome was that the regions with high employment rate had less crime rate as compare to regions with high unemployment rate.

    To tackle this menace, there should be a flexible working schedules for parents or guidance of young ones for them to have ample time to monitor or observe their offsprings and characters of their friends on whether they can influence them positively or negatively. In addition, leaders across the world should ensure that more jobs are created especially for the youth which will help reduce crime rate significantly.

    In conclusion, lack of parental care and ever increasing jobless people across the earth are some of the causes of sudden increased in crime. I recommend that the appropriate authorities should put measures like allowing working parents to have more time for their children and also more jobs should be created for the youth.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Very good start with the introduction, just avoid ‘young ones’ some examiners might consider it informal. ‘parents or guidance’ guidance is wrongly used here. ‘teenagers learned or copied most of their attitudes and behaviours’ better children inculcate the traits positive or negative which their friends exhibit. ’caused of criminality’ you mean cause of. ‘as compare to’ as compared to. You can avoid repetition of words for example you used the word menace twice, to impress the examiner and score good on lexical resources parameter try to bring variety in your writing, instead of menace you can use scourge. Overall it is a very good attempt and can easily score 6.5 bands.

  6. Haruun says:

    The two pie charts illustrate the outcome of a study on various forms of learning and recreational activities being practiced by young males and females. Overall, it can be noticed that the boys were more interested in playing computer games, while many of the girls opted to dance, however both sexes showed the same interest in listening to music.

    First of all, majority of the males preferred playing computer games for leisure, which stood at 34%,followed by those interested in basketball, accounting for 26%, 17% of the boys participated in soccer, proportions of the boys who were engaged in skateboarding and listening to music were 11% and 10% respectively.

    On the opposite sex, high number of the females participated in dancing, which was 27%,then 21% were engaged in reading, percentages of the girls interested in playing computer games and netball were 16% and 15% respectively, 11% preferred doing gymnastics and the least were those who listened to music as a leisure, being 10%.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘young males and females’ the data is for children’s activities, children are different from young male and female. In this second paragraph there is no full stop, the entire paragraph is one sentence with commas which is not the right way to write, break it down to at least separate sentences. Same feedback for the last paragraph. ‘On the opposite sex’ wrong formation, write for the opposite sex.

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