IELTS Writing Test 5

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Task 1: The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it is too late to do something about it. Others think that there is still time to take effective action. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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36 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 5”

  1. Durrah says:

    When human beings try seeking the requirements of their life, they forget or ignore the side effect of their action on ecosystem around th world. While there are some people believe that it is very late to find a way to avoid it, I would aregue that there is enough time to take the right step against these harmful acts.

    In one hand, some people believe that there is nothing to do against the negative effects which caused by human beings’ acts toward the ecosystem, as it becomes too late. Some of these acts forced some kinds of animals migrate to other areas due to the changes that are made by humans. For example: There are more one billion houses that were depending on bambbo trees, as I read recently. Cutting a lot of these trees caused a lot of problems to the enviroment, such as: Soil erosion.

    On the other hand, other people believe that there are enough time to do something regarding these actions, For instance: Shedding some lights on these issues on the media may encourage some researchers and even governments around the world to cooperate together to do something regarding it.

    In conclusion, comparing the two views, I believe that there is enough time to take the effective action by the governments to take the right step.

  2. Lizzy says:

    TASK 2

    The day to day activities of humans in one way or another has affected their surroundings. While some think that it is too late to make amends on the negative actions human activities has caused others think there’s still time. I agree to a large extent that there is still time to right our wrongs and this essay will discuss both sides of the argument.
    Firstly, the activities of people has had a debilitating effect on plants and animals which is evidenced by high death rate of sea creatures due to water pollution by oil leakages from industrial pipes. For instance, research has shown that about 23 out of 100 whales die annually all over the World due to pollution thereby causing these species to risk extinction. Also, water pollution has affected humans indirectly from the consumption of these infected animals with higher rates in those who consume fish in form of sushi or under cooked one which may already have harmful organism like tapeworm in it and when ingested will cause a whole lot of health issues in individuals with low immunity.
    On the other hand, there is still time to take effective action by creating worldwide awareness in social media and media houses like television sand radio stations, that is, a segment of their broadcasts be allocated to encouraging people and teaching them the importance of caring for widlifes while refraining form poaching and deforestation. Also the Government should place sanctions on industries and companies dealing with fuels and oil pipes by creating policies,rules and regulations that will serve as a guide and when these are not followed,sanctions will be placed on them.
    In conclusion, I strongly agree that it is not too late for humans to take positive actions that will begin to have a good effect on our biosystem by doing away with harmful activities like land and water pollution of the marine life and animals by creating awareness globally on their essence and by Government creating policies that will serve as a guide for industries dealing with fuels and oil pipes. If all these measures are put in place,I believe the World will be a better place.

  3. RINAL KANSARA says:

    task-1. The bar graph reveals the percentage of Australian males and females from various age groups who had done physical activity in 2010. According to the graph,females of 15 to 24 initiated at 47.7% and percentages swelled slightly almost to half quarter(48.9%) to well over five tenth(53.3%)in the following three age groups,it again collapsed gradually just under the half (47.1%) in the age group of 55 to over 65. As per the graph,males from Australia,recorded with 52.8% in the first age group and it slowly leaped nearly under the two fifth (39.5%) in previous two range of age before it grew up in over a four tenth(43.1%) in the age from 45 to 54.Furthermore, it again soared approximately with 3% in last two age groups. Ironically,it can be eventually said that,it is a paradoxical pattern, within a time span of one year both had up and down trend and in the older people it remained plateau.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Do not use the word initiated here because it means started but percentages are never started. Half quarter is wrong phrase. Half means 50% and quarter means 25% these are two different terms. Also do not write numbers in bracket either right 50% or half. Do not use word ironically because it means you are making you interpretation which is not required in task 1 you just have to explain what is written in the graph. Never use words collapse and gradually together because collapse means sudden fall but gradual means slow fall. Never write ‘recorded with 52.8%’ write recorded 52.8%.

  4. prasanna says:

    Humans have been able to outperform other species due to the superior intelligence they are endowed with. As a result, humans have been the cause of extinction of many species of plants and animals. Owing to the rate of increasing human activity on the planet, some believe that this is an irreversible process while others believe that humans can still make this place a better place for existing flora and fauna. I am more inclined to stand with the second opinion.
    People who hold the first view think that the human attitude toward the nature will be the same in the future. According to them, most humans have lack of care for the environment and as a result environmental impact caused by the now developed countries will be repeated in the emerging economies like China and India . It is also undeniable that during the early expeditions of humans many species got extinct like Dodo in Mauritius and Moa in New Zealand. Proponents of this view also blame the lack of corporation between counties in dealing with environment issues. Some countries have not signed the Kyoto protocol and these negative view holders are firmly of the belief that the situation would not change.
    On the other hand, many others believe that the situation can be reversed and at least the existing environment can be saved. Through the conservation efforts, many species of animals that have become nearly extinct have been saved. For example, Cheetah and the Condor are two animal species that have been rescued from extinction. Further, due to strict implementation of the laws by the governments the rate of deforestation has been decreased at least in developed countries. Moreover, due to technological advancements and growing self-awareness, contemporary humans are not as bad polluters as they were during the last few decades. People who hold the first view just turn a blind eye towards these facts.
    In conclusion, I would like to say that the future world will be a better place for plants and animals as the humans will be better educated and they are prone to change as opposed to the people who assume a static nature for human mind set.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Again ending of introduction is not proper. Please watch in the video that how to end the introduction. you should tell what will be discussed in the rest of the essay. Structure is not correct divide second para into two paragraphs discussing different views in each para. Avoid using strong negative words like blind eye, another point which is discussed in the video. Use mild words for negative sentences. Otherwise it is good. Your English is good but still need work on including better vocabulary. Keep it up.

  5. RINAL KANSARA says:

    here i have written half quarter,one forth and all…….this type of sentences can i write in bar graph?OR it is only for pie chart?in bar graph only i can use percentages?let me know plz.i m getting confuse about it

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Half quarter is wrong phrase it is either half (1/2) or quarter (1/4). You can use in any graph with numbers because these are numerical ratios but make sure that you know the actual meaning of these phrases. For example, if the task is bar graph showing revenue of company and lets say in 2017 it was 100 rupees and in 2018 it was 25 rupees then you can write that in 2018 the revenue was reduced to one-fourth as compared to the previous year’s revenue.

  6. Sayali Vaidya says:

    The bar chart demonstrates the percentages of males and females in Australia who exercises every day and are fit in the year 2010. The chart is described according to the ages of men and women.

    Overall, ratio for female is higher than those of males except in one age group. This is reason womens are always fit. Whereas the males are seen in a decreasing trend at first and then the number increases.

    In age group 15 -24 years percentage of males is bit higher than females. (Males had 52.8% whereas females had 47.7%) . But, percentages of females in age group, from 25 to 64 years was always greater than that compared to males. Moreover, there was nearbout same number of females in age group 45-54 and 55-64.

    The maximum number of males who did not exercise daily fall in group 35 to 44. As men and women grow older they started focusing more on their health and became health conscious. Therefore, it is seen that there was approximately same number of men and women who exercises daily with 46.7 and 47.1 percentages respectively.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is a good attempt but needs few corrections. ‘are fit in the year’ it is not give in the graph so do not add anything in task 1 from yourself. Instead of females and males use female and male. Again you have interpreted in overall that women are fitter than men which is not mentioned in the graph. You need to watch our video on how to write the task 1 as per the evaluation parameters that examiners. Do not write anything in bracket. ‘was always greater than’ you cannot say that it was the case always it is just in this case here. In the last paragraph again you have given your opinion which is wrong. Please watch this video carefully and improve your attempt.

  7. Sayali Vaidya says:

    Dear team,
    Thank you for your reply. I really appreciate your wonderful work. Also, I watched the video you recommended. It helped me a lot.
    May I know my band for this task1?
    Thank you once again.

  8. thanu says:

    The given chart depicts the proportion of regular physical activities of Austrailian males and females who were in the different age groups in the year 2010.
    Overall, the highest percentage of females prefered physical activities in the age group from 45 to 54.Majority of males (52.8) did physical activities from 15 to 24 ages.
    According to the chart,the proportion of males who did activities were decreasing dramatically from 15 to 44 ages. But, it was grown after 45 years old.The age group of 65 and over was a roughly equal percentage of both(46.7-47.1)
    .There was a considerable difference between males and females in the age group from 35 to 44 which means, the proportion of females were risen than males(39.5 – 52.2).
    10% of females were grown than males(43.1-53.3) in the age group from 45 – 54.The percentages of females were slightly same between age groups of 45 – 54 and 55-64.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Please do not write numbers in bracket () and also you did not mention % sign with numbers. In the graph numbers are given without % sign but you have to write it in the answer because in the graph it is mentioned above that numbers are in percentages. ‘were decreasing dramatically’ is wrong decreased dramatically is right phrase here. ‘it was grown after’ is also ‘it grew for’ males of age 45 and above. ‘proportion of females were risen than males’ is again wrong. You need to work on your sentence structure. Best method is watch our videos on different task types and use those sentences as template that will help you to make correct and better sentences.

  9. thanu says:

    ok thank you sir

  10. Harjit says:

    The given chart compares the proportion of Australian men and women of six age groups who did regular physical exercise in 2010.
    Overall, it is clear that the percentage of male remained higher than female in routine exertion in the given year. Majority of men who showed interest were from 45 to 54 age range whilst women were 15 to 24 years old .
    Between 15 to 24 years were on lead with 52.8% followed by 65 and over with 46.7%. Little variation can be noticed in the proportion of three female age groups between 55 to 64 , 45 to 54 and 25 to 34. Their percentage remained 45.1 , 43.1 and 42.2 respectively.Lowest proportion of women who showed little interest in regularity were belonged to 35 to 44 age group. Meanwhile, highest 53.3% men of 45 to 64 age remained regular in exercise followed by 55 to 64 (53%) and 35 to 44 age range(52.5%). 65 and over male and female spent almost equal amount of time on workout.

    (Plz let me know about bands and mistakes . i want 7 .

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Men and women belonging to six different age groups, not of six age groups. ‘percentage of male remained higher’ huge mistake, look at the chart carefully and % of women is more in majority of age groups. ‘Between 15 to 24 years were on lead with 52.8% followed by 65 and over with 46.7%’ wrong sentence formation and no mention of gender here. You have got all the numbers wrong interchanging males with females. You will get maximum of 1 band out of 3 in this task.

  11. Anj says:

    The given bar graph highlights the proportion of both genders of Australian people who had performed physical exercise daily among various age groups in a given year 2010.

    Overall, it was evident that as age advanced , the figures for women had been significantly increased than men in 2010.

    According to the chart ,52.8 per cent of men were engaged in physical activity in the age group of 15-24 years of age which was recorded as the highest figures in men . After that,the trends had been dramatically decreased to certain point and touched a downward peak of 39.5 percent in the age group of 35 -45 years.However , the figures rose considerably from 43.1 % to as high as 46.7 % upto the age group of 65 and over which was almost the same figures for both genders .

    On the other side ,the trends had been erratic among women of different age groups. The percentage of women physical activity had been steadily increased from the age group of 15 to 64 years which was recorded as 47.7% to 53% respectively,followed by gradual fell in figures of about 47.1 % in the age group of 65 years and over .

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Had significantly increased not had been significantly increased. ‘trends had been dramatically decreased’ same mistake here, please learn the correct usage of had and had been. 43.1 %? for which age group. ‘the trends had been erratic’, this is correct usage of had been. ‘women physical activity had been’ women doing physical activity and here also incorrect usage of had been steadily increased it should be not had steadily increased or only steadily increased. ‘gradual fell’ it should be gradual fall not fell.

      • Anj says:

        Am getting too confused with had been and has been . Plz suggest me how to rectify it

        • IELTS MASTER says:

          Majority of task 1 are of past data so you can simply use had or simple past for your task. There is no need to use had been if you do not know the correct usage of it. Try to reduce confusion, keep it simple but keep it correct.

  12. Rinal kansara says:

    It is irrefutable that ,there are detrimental effects of human activities on flora and fauna.Since humans have started to live luxurious life,they holistically forgot their moral liability towards wildlife.While some people advocate that it is impossible to protect them,some believe that still individuals can save them.But,i support the latter one notion and in the following section both views will be mentioned.

    To commense with,nowdays in modern era, technology has become a corner stone for individuals.Therefore, people can stop research on animals by taking assist of technology and it is easy to make a robot for human surgery,find new medicines,vaccines.Also,they should not utilize unwanted commodies which are made by died animals such as purse,blankates,shoes.Secondly, everywhere individuals cut trees for their own profit. Furthermore, government should be penalized individuals for cutting down trees because they demolish greeneries for several reasons to earn money,make furniture,living purpose.Also, organizations should stop the production of cosmetics and unnecessary things which are made by flora.For instance,in India,every school impart in-depth knowledge of science and environment and students have been celebrating the world environment day on 5th June by planting trees every year.
    On the contrary,due to scarcity of living space, it is certainly arduous to take steps.Moreover, population is proliferating at a startling pace over the world owing to globalization and people have created skyscrapers for living purpose and entertainment such as shopping malls.Secondly,hunters often desire to hunt some species and people also like to eat meat. Consequently,some species have certainly extinct.
    To recapitulate,could people take some action to save nature? Definitely, only humans can do it and it is their first responsibility to protect it.While people have built houses and hunted several animals,they should grow more trees and government should be banned on animal research to save lives of trees and animals.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      There should not be a comma after but in last line of introduction. Either write latter one or latter notion. commense? it should be commence. cornerstone is one word not two. commodies? which are made of dead animals not died animals. Government should penalize not government should be penalized because it means to fine the government. You do not write and in the last part of line where you use commas for example ‘money,make furniture,living purpose’, there should be and after furniture. ‘some species have certainly extinct’ some species have become extinct. Do not write question in your conclusion. Again government should be banned is wrong, government should ban. Overall a decent attempt as compared to your previous attempts.

  13. Rinal kansara says:

    The bar graph reveals the proportion of physical activity which was done by two genders of Australia in the year of 2010.
    Overall,the percentage of both Australian genders of different age groups oscillated in 2010.
    According to the graph,in Australia, in 2010,52.8 percent men of first age group indulged in physical activity and interest of the second men age group reduced 42.2 percent.Moreover,the figure of 35 to 44 male age group smoothly declined 39.5 percent whereas it swelled slightly in the next age group.Afterwards,the ratio of male group went up North from 45.1in 55 to 64 group to 46.7 in the group of 65 and more.
    As per the graph,in 2010,47.7 percent Australian women of first age group started physical activity and percentage raised 48.9 in the second group.Furthermore,the figure of third age group female gradually soared 52.5% and then reached its zenith, 53.5 % in the group of 45 to 54 before deciding 53% in the fifth group.Again, the proportion of last age group plummeted 47.1%.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is not the proportion of physical activity but the proportion of people doing physical activity in different age groups. Do not write first age group mention clearly which age group you are talking about. Similarly with the second age group. Reduced to 42.2% not reduced 42.2%. 45.1 what? % is missing here. ‘North from 45.1 in 55 to 64 group to 46.7 in the group of 65 and more’ it is not group only it is age group. Women started physical activity is wrong, women did some kind of physical activity, you do not know when did they start. deciding 53%? Plummeted to 47.1%, not plummeted 47.1%.

  14. Jazzz says:

    Please correct my essay and give score as well!!!!
    Thank you!!

    The given column graph compares the proportion of A male and female of six different age group who did regular physical activity in australia, in 2010.It is manifest from the graph that maximum number of male from 15 -24 and female from 45-54 age group did regular physical activity.

    In 15-24 age group, a little more than half(52.8%) male and little less than half female did physical exercise. In 25-34,percentage of a male and female who induldge themselves into physical activity were 42.2℅ and 48.9% ,respectively. For 35-44 age group those percentage were 39.5℅ and 52.5%. More number of People did physical exercise from 45-54 age group as compared to 35-44 age group. Percentage almost remained same for 45 to 54 and 55-64 age group, male stood at around 45% and female at 53%. 46% aged males and 47.1% aged women did regular physical activity.

    Overall, it can be seen that except for 15-24 year olds, all other group had more number of female than male who lead active life.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘ A male’? ‘six different age group’ groups not group. Always write countries names with capital letters. ‘It is manifest’ wrong usage of word manifest here. Never write numbers in bracket. ‘a male and female’ a should not come here. ‘who induldge’ indulged in not into. ‘all other group’ groups. ‘who lead active life’ led not lead. Break second paragraph into two separate paragraphs it becomes confusing when you put so many number in one paragraph.

  15. Bonnie says:

    The bar chart gives information about the proportion of Australian males and females who ha done physical activity in various age groups in 2010.

    Overall, when comparing the web genders, it seems that the illustrates opposite trend when they were getting older.

    According to the result, between 15 to 24 age groups presented that 52.8% of men and 47.7% of women did physical activity regularly in 2010. After 24 years old until 44 years old, there was a significant decrease in percentage of men’s groups by 13.3 percentage points, while ratio of women’s groups rose to 52.5%.

    In age groups 45 to 54, proportion of both gender’s groups increased to 43.1% and 53.3%, respectively. From 55 years old to over 65 years old, ratio of men’s groups went up to 46.7% slowly, whereas ratio of women’s groups went down by 6.2 percentage points.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘ha done’ had done. ‘web genders’? ‘it seems that the illustrates’ you cannot use seems with illustrates, use either of one. ‘both gender’s groups increased to 43.1% and 53.3%, respectively’ mention which gender comes first otherwise how will the examiner that which number is for which gender. And word count is less than 150 which is unacceptable. Write more and try to elaborate more.

  16. Anum says:

    Hello sir,
    I have question about discussion essay . Should I write first body paragraph to whom I agree or in the sequence it is given in the topic. I mean if I agree to the second part of topic than should I write it first para or in a second para. ?

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It is better to write in first paragraph the part you agree with.

      • Srikanthreddy says:

        The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female belong to six different age group who had done their physical activity every day for the period 2010.
        Overall, it is observed from the charts that the percentage of female witnessed a increase exercise over the period year, whereas the male showed a lowest proportion activity.
        According to the men, in the age group 15-24 years saw a more exercise, this figure accounted at 52.8% before falling by 42.2 per in the 25 to 34 years and again consistent decline rate of 39.5% for the age 35 to 44. After that, there was a increase for two age group of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 years and its was 43.1 % and 45.1% respectively. Finally, for the year of 65 and over was at 46.7%.
        As said by women, the female started at 47.7% for 15 to 24 years and this rose by 1.2 for the age group of 25 to 34 years. For three different age group was a similar pattern percentage for approximately 53%. However it was a sharp drop trend in age 65 and above which was 47.1 percentage.

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