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IELTS Writing Test 28

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Task 1: The diagrams below show UK students’ responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Task 2: Online, people write product reviews and opinions about services. Is it a good thing or bad thing?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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18 responses to “IELTS Writing Test 28”

  1. Rinal kansara says:

    The pie chart depicts the information regarding responses of the UK pupils for the question that what extent would they elaborate themselves as financially organised while the table reveals the pupils of different age group who have response for very organized. According to the graph,pupils of minority proportion would describe themselves as not at all organised and five fold students would explain themselves as not very organised. Furthermore,more than one fifth of very organized and experience raise double for fairly organised. As per the table, for very organised,total 21% pupils give responses and exact a quarter teenagers. Although 25% in the age group of 22 and over 22, it again grew slightly approximately three tenth in the range of 23 to 25.Moreover,in the adult group, it again increase and two fold that of 23 to 25. Overall,from the pie graph, less students have the answers for not at all organised whereas more have about fairly organised.The table illustrates more adults have reply of very organization and all students have less.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Who responded to very organized not have response for. Would will not be used since the data is from past. Gave responses not give same mistake here the task should be written in past tense. This mistake is repeated nearly with all the verbs.

  2. Rinal kansara says:

    Plz let me know in which tense here I have to write?future tense? future simple?I have sent u but I didn’t write it nicely.i request you to plz give me ur feedback so I can improve

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      It should be written in the past tense because this is a kind of survey in students were asked some questions and their responses are shown in the pie and table.

  3. RINAL KANSARA says:

    let me know how to determine tense when year is not would given but we also use it for future

  4. RINAL KANSARA says:

    It is irrefutable that technology is the cornerstone of the modern world.It has helped us to make advances in all spheres of of life.Since in every factors of life uses of technology are proliferating at startling pace,individuals opt to use online product and after using it people expose their reviews on social media regarding to the features of products.Whilst it has both negative and fruitful influences ,I support the notion that it had more profound rewarding impacts.In the following section I will discuss both views along with my arguments.
    Examining all the arguments,the prior one to prove my view is,writing comments are absolutely gainful for individuals , it aware them about quality and brand of comodity because in online shopping individuals can not be touched or saw it in live.Furthermore,if it is good,the company gets a great success and fame as well as it attract the plenty of people and gets huge profit besides,if it is worthless people can easily save their money and time.After reading company do not stop to engender product;however,it paves the way to company to ameliorate problems in product and try to enhance quality according to demand of customers.Moreover,more sales also escalate the economy of the country by paying a GST and tax.Another point worth noting is,myriad people of all over the globe buy plethora things from Amazon but prior to shopping it always read reviews and after using it they give their comment as per their own experience.
    On the contrary,reading reviews for products company lose their reputation in community and also among their competitor because when people do not buy products,it is certainly arduous for them to sell it and they suffer from big loss.Additionally,their regular customer embark to purchase commodities from other company.
    To recapitulate,weighing up both sides of the argument,online shopping is definitely gainful for people although,comments aid to people take in-depth knowledge of the commodity which they are going to use.Thus, advantages are far than disadvantages of giving a review.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Do not write factors of life instead write various fields. ‘Regarding to the’ do not write ‘to’ here. It had more, has more not had. Instead of gainful write informative. It aware them, instead write it apprises them. Commodity spelling is wrong. ‘Online shopping individuals cannot be touched’ wrong sentence formation, you are not touching individuals you are touching the product. Paves the way for not to. Comments aid to people, ‘to’ will not come here.

  5. Rinal kansara says:

    Would u plz tell me. 1) instead of gainful what should I write? informative means? 2)is it correct?when people do online shopping they are unable to touch product in live. 3) always it is paves the way for ?in all sentences?……. I write all mistakes in notebook which u tell me and daily read it so I can’t repeat it i m asking u.plz would u tell me?help me

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Informative means something that gives you useful information. Second line is correct. Yes always paves the way for.

  6. Haruna says:

    The given pie chart and table highlight the reactions of students in the UK about how they are able to organise their funds. Overall, it can be noticed from the pie chart that more than half of the student population fairly managed their finances, percentages of very organized and not very organized students were less than a quarter each, and the least size were those who are not at all organized. Also, from the table majority of the ratio of students whose funds were very organized are age over 26 years and least proportion of very organized were age up to 25 years.

    In management of the finances, 55% of the size of students fairly organized their funds,which was the largest, followed by the proportions of those whose finances were very organized and not very organized being closely at 21% and 20% respectively, and the smallest ratio among them were the students whose monies were not at all organized, just at 4%.

    In terms of the percentage of very organized students which stood at 21%,and out of that 49% were age over 26years, age 23 to 25 years and age up to 22 years were 26% and 25% respectively.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Least size is a wrong phrase here, instead use the lowest proportion. Who were not at all not are because data is from past. In this task are will not be used because survey data is always of the past. Do not use the word monies some examiners might consider it informal instead use money only.

  7. Vivek says:

    The pie chart and tabular graph illustrates the information about UK students that how they will described themselves as financially organised.The scale is in percentage.
    To start with,as pie chart gives detail about managing finances where only 4% of students said that they are not at all organised and nearly 20% of students told that they are not very organised where as 55% of students said that they are fairly organised and 21% replied that they are very organised.
    On the other hand,tabular graph gives information about different age group students who are very organised where only 25% of people are from age upto 22 years and students between age 23 and 25 years are about 26% .Moreover, students age over 26 years who are very organised are nearly half percentage which means 50% respectively.
    Overall, as per pie chart highest percentage of UK students says that they can fairly organised to manage finance and as per tabular graph students more than age 26 years can organised very well in managing finances.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      The pie chart and tabular graph illustrate not illustrates because these are plural hence no ‘s’ with verb, take care of this mistake since it is very common among students. Always use ‘the’ with UK. ‘how they will described’ is wrong will is future tense and described is past. You have used present tense with word ‘are’ which is wrong since the survey had been done in the past so here were should be used. You need to correct your usage of phrases given in the table since you have used it wrong almost everywhere in the task. For example, ‘fairly organised to manage finance’ write formation is ‘said they were fairly organised at managing their finances’, similarly ‘organised very well in managing finances’ is also wrong.

  8. Rinal Kansara says:

    The pie chart reveals responses of the UK students to the question of what extent they would manage their finances.

    Overall, the ratio of the pupils of fairly managed was the highest and pupils over 26 years were very organised their finances.

    According to the pie chart, the ratio of students who had not very organised their finances was five times that of not at all organised finance. Furthermore,more than two tenth gave reply that they very organized their finances and the ratio of students who had told that they were able to manage their finance was well over a two quarter.

    The table depicts that,in the response of very organised students, exactly a quarter students were up to 22 years and 1% more students of the age between 23 to 25 years than age of 22 years and less.Moreover, the ratio of the pupils of greater than 26 years was 49% points.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      ‘pupils of fairly managed’ pupils who fairly managed their finances was the highest. ‘very organised their finances’ very organised in managing their finances. ‘who had not very organised their finances’ who were not very organised in managing their finances, who have made the same mistake in entire task. Students are organised but about what? they are organised in managing their finances.

  9. Rinal Kansara says:

    It is a fact that now a days, technology is proliferating at startling pace across the globe.Since people have started online shopping,after using the commodities they write their response in the comment box.While some people write positive responses,some give negative reply.But,i believe that opinions of customers are beneficial and in the following section this view will be discussed.

    To commence with,online shopping is convenient for individuals as it saves their time and money.Therefore, after utilising the products consumers opine their personal response regarding products which are helpful for the company.If customers have good response,definitely it enhances the economy and sales of the company. Also,the company receive negative comments,they aware of market value of the goods and try to improve the quality of the products according to the taste of customers.

    Moreover,prior to buying online commodity,people always check the reviews of other people who have already used it.As a result,these attract more customers to buy the products as well as individuals come to know features of goods.To illustrate, every day plenty of people purchase products from online application Amazon and they give their responses as per their own experience and before buying products customers read that its quality is good or inferior?

    To recapitulate,technology plays vital role in individuals life and review of people is one link between company and customers which aware of company about their own products without doing any market research.

    • IELTS MASTER says:

      Good introduction. ‘helpful for the company’ should be ‘helpful for other prospective buyers’. ‘the company receive negative comments’ receives not receive. ‘good or inferior?’ remove question mark. It is a very good attempt with very few grammatical mistakes you effort on improving grammar is showing in your tasks. Again individuals life, we have pointed out this mistake nearly 5 times but you do not improve clearly you are taking feedback from someone else who has told you to write like this, we suggest that you follow one teacher otherwise you will get confused. It is never a good idea to study one subject from two different teachers at the same time. Please follow your instructor and get your tasks checked by him/ her that will be more beneficial for you and we are not saying this because we are mad instead we have your best interest at heart that is why it is advisable to follow one trainer only.

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